Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise, and directly address the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Use linking words to show contrast when you change the idea (e.g., "but" or "however"). Avoid repetition and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes. When I was a child I dreamed of becoming a dentist because my mother had bad teeth. However, later I decided against it because a bad experience at the dentist put me off.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you share dreams. Then give a specific reason using linking words like "because" and add a brief detail. Correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I often share my career dreams with friends. For example, a friend and I both want to be pilots because the job pays well and offers steady employment.

제안: Answer directly and clearly with one main idea, then support it with a specific reason. Use correct sentence structure and linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid vague phrases; give a concrete explanation of what kind of meaning you think dreams have.

예시: Yes, I think dreams can reflect our feelings and concerns because they often show what we worry about or hope for. For instance, dreaming about exams might mean you are anxious about performance.

제안: Give a direct yes/no response, then explain briefly why with one clear reason and an example. Keep sentences short and grammatically correct; use linking words like "because" to connect idea and avoid filler phrases.

예시: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true because they motivate me to work hard. For example, my dream to become a pilot drives me to study physics and save money for flight training.

× I used to dream about be growing up to be a dentist because my mom's teeth are not so good condition.

✓ I used to dream about growing up to be a dentist because my mom's teeth were not in good condition.

The verb after 'dream about' should be in the -ing form (gerund), so 'be growing' is incorrect; use 'growing'. Also 'teeth are not so good condition' has article and preposition errors; correct to 'teeth were not in good condition' to match past reference 'used to'.

× No but no she makes made me hate dentist so I stopped dreaming about this.

✓ No, but she made me hate dentists, so I stopped dreaming about it.

Pronoun and noun usage errors: use past tense 'made' (remove 'makes'), plural 'dentists' is natural, and refer back to 'dream' with 'it'. Add commas for clarity.

× I share with my dream with my friends a pilot.

✓ I share my dream with my friend to become a pilot.

Redundant 'with' and incorrect noun forms: 'share with my dream with' should be 'share my dream with'. 'Friends a pilot' is unclear; likely singular 'friend' and purpose phrase 'to become a pilot'.

× We both want to be pilot because it has a good salary and good job.

✓ We both want to be pilots because they have good salaries and good jobs.

Subject-verb and number agreement: 'pilot' should be plural 'pilots' to match 'we'. Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to pilots and plural 'salaries' and 'jobs' or rephrase singular consistently. Also 'a good salary and good job' mismatches; use plural or consistent singular form.

× Yes, it's presents who we are.

✓ Yes, it presents who we are.

Unnecessary apostrophe and grammar: 'it's presents' is wrong because 'it's' (it is) does not collocate with 'presents'. Use 'it presents' (it shows) or more natural 'it reveals who we are.'

× Help us to know each each other and for the brilliant future.

✓ It helps us get to know each other and plan for a brighter future.

Sentence fragments and repetition: 'Help us' lacks subject; add 'It' to refer to dreams. Remove duplicated 'each'. Use 'get to know each other' and 'plan for a brighter future' for natural phrasing.

× That's the obvious question.

✓ That's an obvious question.

Article choice: 'the obvious question' implies a specific known question; 'an obvious question' is more natural in this context.

× Why wouldn't I Don't want to make my dream come true.

✓ Why wouldn't I want to make my dream come true?

Confused negation and mixed sentence fragments: combine into one negative question 'Why wouldn't I want...' and use a question mark. Remove the extra 'Don't'.

× Of course I want it to be true because.

✓ Of course I want it to come true.

Sentence fragment: 'because' at the end creates an incomplete clause. Remove 'because' or complete the clause; 'I want it to come true' is a complete sentence.

× My dreams are special.

✓ My dreams are special.

No grammatical error; sentence is correct as written. (Included to show no change needed.)