Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct article use, plural/singular forms and word order (for example: "many dreams" not "a many dreams"). Avoid repeating the same idea and reduce filler phrases.

예시: Yes — I remember many dreams. For example, one big ambition is to start my own business; I want to become a businesswoman because I enjoy solving problems and leading teams. To reach this goal, I am studying business and saving money so I can launch a company after I graduate.

제안: Clarify whether you share your dreams and give a clear reason. Use a direct topic sentence and one supporting detail with linking words (because, so, for example). Avoid vague statements and fillers like "uh". If you mean you don't share dreams for privacy or fear of criticism, say that specifically.

예시: No, I usually don't share my dreams with many people because I worry they might criticize or discourage me. However, I sometimes tell close family members for support, and their feedback helps me plan practical steps.

제안: Give a clear opinion and explain it with an example. Use correct subject-verb agreement and simple vocabulary if unsure. If you believe dreams have meanings, say why (e.g., they reflect feelings or goals) and add a specific example of a dream and its possible meaning.

예시: Yes, I think some dreams reflect our feelings or future goals. For instance, when I dream about starting a company, it usually means I am excited and motivated to work toward that goal.

제안: Answer directly and provide one or two concrete actions you are taking to achieve your dreams. Use varied vocabulary but keep sentences short and accurate. Replace repeated phrases with specific plans or timelines to show determination and realism.

예시: Yes, I want my dreams to come true and I am taking concrete steps. For example, I am studying business administration, doing internships, and saving money so that within five years I can start my own company.

× Yes, I have a many dreams in my life.

✓ Yes, I have many dreams in my life.

The phrase 'a many' is incorrect. Use 'many' with plural countable nouns without the article 'a'. Use 'a' only with singular nouns. Suggestion: say 'many dreams' or 'a lot of dreams.'

× In the future I will be businesswoman.

✓ In the future I will be a businesswoman.

The sentence lacks the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'businesswoman.' In occupations we use 'a' or 'an' with singular countable nouns. Also future tense 'will be' is correct, just add 'a.'

× It is my big dream in my life.

✓ It is my biggest dream in my life.

The original 'my big dream' is understandable but 'big dream' with 'in my life' suggests a superlative: use 'biggest' to show it is the most important. Alternatively keep 'a big dream of mine.' Suggestion: 'It is my biggest dream' or 'It is a big dream of mine.'

× So I have never asked my dreams, other people because it is dangerous.

✓ So I have never told other people about my dreams because it is dangerous.

The verb 'asked my dreams' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'tell' or 'share' and the preposition 'about' is required. Word order 'other people' should follow the verb. Suggestion: 'I have never told other people about my dreams.'

× Uh, I think it is not it, uh, it won't be.

✓ I think it is not safe to do so; it won't be safe.

The sentence is vague and ungrammatical: 'it is not it' is wrong. Clarify with 'it is not safe' or 'it is not good' and keep consistent structure. Suggestion: 'I think it is not safe; it won't be.'

× Uh, other people know it.

✓ Other people might know about it.

Add modality 'might' to express possibility and preposition 'about' after 'know' when referring to information. Suggestion: 'Other people might know about it.'

× Uh, I can do it because, uh, it is.

✓ I can achieve my dreams because I will work hard.

'Because it is' is incomplete and unclear. Provide a clear reason clause. Suggestion: explain why you can do it, e.g., 'because I am determined' or 'because I will work hard.'

× Yes, dream is grinding in the world.

✓ Yes, dreams are common in the world.

Singular 'dream' with no article is incorrect; use plural 'dreams' or 'a dream.' 'Grinding' is wrong word choice; use 'common' or 'popular.' Also subject-verb agreement requires 'dreams are.' Suggestion: 'Yes, dreams are common in the world.'

× Everyone have a lot of dreams.

✓ Everyone has a lot of dreams.

'Everyone' is singular and requires the third person singular verb 'has,' not 'have.' Maintain agreement: 'Everyone has.'

× There are many a lot of Zing, especially I think my.

✓ There are many dreams, especially mine.

The phrase 'many a lot of' is redundant and incorrect; use either 'many' or 'a lot of.' 'Zing' is unclear and likely wrong word; use 'dreams.' Replace 'I think my' with 'mine.' Suggestion: 'There are many dreams, especially mine.'

× Yes, I believe my dreams come true in the future.

✓ Yes, I believe my dreams will come true in the future.

When expressing a future event following 'believe,' use 'will' + base verb to indicate future: 'will come true.' Present simple 'come' does not fit intended future meaning.

× I never give up.

✓ I never give up.

The sentence is grammatically correct as a present simple statement expressing habitual action. No change needed. Suggestion: keep as is or strengthen with 'I will never give up' to emphasize future determination.

× I can do it, so I try to do it in the in the future I will achieve these dreams.

✓ I can do it, so I will try to make them happen; in the future I will achieve these dreams.

Original is repetitive and has awkward tense shifts. Use 'will try' for future intention and combine clauses clearly. Remove duplicated 'in the.' Suggestion: 'I will try to make them happen; in the future I will achieve these dreams.'

× It is really big dreams in my life.

✓ They are really big dreams in my life.

Mismatch between subject and verb: 'It is' with plural 'dreams' is wrong. Use 'They are' for plural. Alternatively use singular: 'It is a really big dream in my life.' Suggestion: match number between subject and verb.