Mirrors— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and correct verb forms and article use (e.g., “a mirror”, “I comb my hair”). Use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I do. I look in the mirror several times a day to comb my hair and check my outfit. For example, before leaving the house I make sure my clothes are neat and my hair is tidy, which helps me feel confident.

제안: Combine short sentences into a clear coherent response and add specific detail. Use linking words (for example, and so) and correct tense and article use. Mention reasons or an example to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, I have. I bought a small mirror to keep in my bag for quick touch-ups when I’m out. I also bought a large full-length mirror for my living room so I can check outfits before going out.

제안: Remove fillers and finish sentences. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example using a linking word like “for example” to make it coherent. Use correct forms (handheld, quickly, touch up).

예시: Yes, I usually carry a small handheld mirror in my bag. For example, I use it to quickly touch up my hair or check my makeup after eating or after being outside.

제안: Clarify your main idea with correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a clear statement (yes/no/rarely) and then explain why using specific details. Avoid repetition and correct word choice (e.g., “not my main purpose”, “it can improve the look of the room”).

예시: Not mainly; I don’t buy mirrors just for decoration, but I sometimes choose attractive mirrors because they can make a room look bigger and brighter. For instance, a large decorative mirror in the living room reflects light and creates the impression of more space.

× 'I use mirror uh, several times a day when I combing my hair and check my outfit, I uh, I will use mirror.'

✓ 'I use a mirror several times a day when I comb my hair and check my outfit; I will use the mirror.'

'Combing' is the incorrect verb form after the auxiliary 'I' in this context; the correct simple present form is "comb". Also add the article "a" before "mirror" and use "the mirror" when referring back to the same mirror. Suggestion: use base verb forms after subject in simple present (I comb, I check) and include appropriate articles.'

× 'I use mirror uh, several times a day when I combing my hair and check my outfit, I uh, I will use mirror.'

✓ 'I use a mirror several times a day when I comb my hair and check my outfit; I will use the mirror.'

'Mirror' needs an article in English. Use 'a mirror' for a mirror in general and 'the mirror' when referring to a specific mirror already mentioned. Suggestion: include 'a' or 'the' before singular countable nouns.'

× 'Of course I have. I bought a small one.'

✓ 'Of course I have. I bought a small one.'

'Have' here is part of present perfect question context ("Have you ever bought mirrors?") and the student's short answer 'Of course I have.' is acceptable; the following sentence 'I bought a small one.' correctly uses simple past to report a past purchase. No correction needed for tense, but keep consistency: you could also say 'I have bought a small one' if emphasizing experience rather than a specific past event.'

× 'I put it in my bag. I can use it every time when I go out.'

✓ 'I put it in my bag. I can use it every time I go out.'

'Every time when' is redundant; use 'every time I go out' or 'whenever I go out.' Also pronoun usage is correct for singular 'it' referring to 'a small mirror.' Suggestion: avoid redundant constructions.'

× 'And I bought a big one, I can check my outfit. So I put it in my living room. I can check.'

✓ 'I also bought a big one so I can check my outfit. I put it in my living room so I can check.'

Run-on and tense consistency: combine clauses with appropriate connectors and keep simple past for the purchase ('bought') and present modal 'can' for ability. Suggestion: use 'also' for addition and link clauses clearly.'

× 'Yes, I carry a handhold mirror in my bag. So, uh, when I go out, I can use it quick, uh, use it, umm, when I need to uh, touch up my hair or I need to check my makeup. It's.'

✓ 'Yes, I carry a handheld mirror in my bag. So when I go out, I can use it quickly when I need to touch up my hair or check my makeup.'

'Handhold' is not the usual adjective; 'handheld' is correct. 'Use it quick' uses adjective instead of adverb; use 'quickly'. Also remove redundant 'I need to' and the unfinished 'It's.' Suggestion: use adverbs to modify verbs and standard adjective forms.'

× 'I carry a handhold mirror in my bag.'

✓ 'I carry a handheld mirror in my bag.'

'Handhold' is not correct; 'handheld' functions as an adjective describing the mirror. The preposition 'in' is correct for placing the mirror inside a bag. Suggestion: learn common adjective forms for compound nouns.'

× 'It's.'

✓ 'It is useful.'

Fragment: 'It's.' is an incomplete sentence. The student likely intended to complete the thought (e.g., 'It's useful' or 'It's handy'). Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by finishing the predicate.'

× 'Urine mirrors to decorate my room is not my purpose, but it do it.'

✓ 'Using mirrors to decorate my room is not my purpose, but they do.'

Multiple errors: 'Urine' is a mispronunciation; should be 'Using'. The subject 'using mirrors' is plural in effect, so when referring back use plural pronoun 'they' and verb 'do'. 'It do it' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use gerund 'using' for activities and match pronouns/verbs in number.'

× 'It can do it because when I put a beautiful mirror in my living room it can make my room look better.'

✓ 'They can because when I put a beautiful mirror in my living room, it can make my room look better.'

Pronoun reference unclear: if referring to mirrors in general, use plural 'they can'; if referring to a specific mirror, keep 'it'. Also add a comma before the subordinate clause. Suggestion: choose consistent singular or plural reference and punctuate clauses.'

× 'But the function function function.'

✓ 'But its function is more important.'

Repetition and fragment: 'the function function function' is unclear and lacks verb. Replace with a complete sentence that communicates the intended idea (e.g., 'But its main function is to reflect images'). Suggestion: avoid filler repetition and form full sentences.'