Mirrors— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, avoid hesitation and repetition, and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Use linking words (for example, because, however) to organize your ideas and keep sentences concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

예시: I don't particularly enjoy looking at myself in the mirror because I often feel self-conscious about my appearance. However, I still check mirrors regularly to make sure I look presentable, especially before leaving the house. For example, I usually glance at the mirror for a minute to fix my hair and outfit. I think social media has raised unrealistic beauty standards, which makes me more self-aware.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence then add one or two concise specific details or an example. Avoid absolute statements (e.g., "every person in the world") and minor grammatical errors. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to make your response coherent and natural.

예시: Yes, I have bought mirrors. I recently bought a small mirror for my room because I wanted something dedicated for makeup and grooming. For example, it helps me check my appearance quickly before going out.

제안: Answer directly, then give a clear reason and a brief example. Reduce fillers (um, uh) and repetition. Use linking words (for instance, because) to connect ideas and aim for two to three sentences total.

예시: No, I usually don't take a mirror with me because my phone camera serves the same purpose. For instance, I use my phone to check my hair or touch up my makeup when I'm out. However, some friends prefer carrying a compact mirror because it is more convenient for quick makeup fixes.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion, then support it with specific details and a short explanation. Avoid hesitations and repeated words. Use linking words (for example, however, so) and keep the answer within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I wouldn't decorate my room with many mirrors because too many can feel unsettling. However, I do have two mirrors: a small one for doing my makeup and a full-length mirror to check outfits. These serve practical purposes without overwhelming the room.

× I don't really enjoy looking at myself in the mirror since I'm a bit self-conscious about my appearance, but I look at mirrors often because of how self-conscious am I? Am I am am I? Unfortunately umm.

✓ I don't really enjoy looking at myself in the mirror since I'm a bit self-conscious about my appearance, but I often look in mirrors because I feel self-conscious. Unfortunately, umm.

This sentence contains disfluent and incorrect word order ('how self-conscious am I? Am I am am I?') which makes it unclear; this is a sentence structure error (ID 26). The corrected version removes the spoken hesitations and reorders the clause to produce a clear, grammatical sentence. Suggestion: avoid repeating fragments and place clauses in normal subject-verb order ('I feel self-conscious'). Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I think that's a huge impact of social media on realistic beauty standards.

✓ I think that's a huge impact of social media on realistic beauty standards.

The original sentence is awkward because 'that' refers to a noun phrase rather than an action; however it is grammatically acceptable. A clearer phrasing would be 'I think social media has a huge impact on realistic beauty standards.' This improves subject-verb clarity and naturalness. This relates to subject-verb agreement and sentence clarity (ID 27). Grammar problem type ID: 27

× Of course I have. I can't imagine a house without any mirrors, since every person in the world sometimes feel the need to look at themselves if they are looking tidy and neat.

✓ Of course I have. I can't imagine a house without mirrors, since every person sometimes feels the need to check whether they look tidy and neat.

Errors: plural/singular mismatch and pronoun issues. 'Every person' is singular and should take 'feels' not 'feel' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27) and 'themselves' is acceptable as a singular gender-neutral pronoun but 'check whether they look' is clearer. Also 'without any mirrors' is wordy; 'without mirrors' is more natural (article/quantifier issues ID 22/14). Suggestions: match singular subjects with singular verbs and use concise phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× So yes, I recently bought a mirror in my room.

✓ So yes, I recently bought a mirror for my room.

The preposition 'in' with 'bought a mirror in my room' is incorrect because the intended meaning is purpose or location where the mirror will be placed. Use 'for my room' to indicate purpose or ownership (preposition/article issue ID 11 and 22). Suggestion: use 'for' when saying you bought something to put in a specific place. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I usually don't since my phone camera does the task that the mirror does for me.

✓ I usually don't, since my phone camera does the job that a mirror would do for me.

The phrase 'does the task that the mirror does for me' is awkward; replace with 'does the job that a mirror would do for me.' Also include article 'a' before 'mirror' for general reference (article error ID 22). This fixes verb phrase naturalness and article usage. Suggestion: use 'does the job' for natural English and include indefinite article for general singular nouns. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× But I have some friends that also take a mirror with themselves since easy since it's easier to uh, do your makeup with a mirror with you.

✓ But I have some friends who also carry a mirror with them because it's easier to do their makeup with a mirror.

Problems: use 'who' for people not 'that' (relative pronoun ID 12), 'take a mirror with themselves' is unidiomatic — use 'carry a mirror with them', and pronoun inconsistency 'your makeup' should match 'friends' so use 'their makeup'. Remove repeated words and filler. Suggestion: use 'who' for people and keep pronouns consistent. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× A lot of mirrors in our room in my opinion kind of look uncanny and scary.

✓ A lot of mirrors in our room, in my opinion, look kind of uncanny and scary.

The sentence needs commas to set off 'in my opinion' and the adverb order 'look kind of uncanny' is more natural. No major grammar violation but punctuation/word order improves clarity (article/word order ID 18/22). Suggestion: place 'in my opinion' between commas and use 'look kind of' for natural speech. Grammar problem type ID: 18

× Umm but I do have two mirrors in my room, one for doing my makeup which is a smaller 1 and I have a full length mirror to check my outfits and my and how I look fully.

✓ Umm, but I do have two mirrors in my room: a smaller one for doing my makeup, and a full-length mirror to check my outfits and see how I look overall.

Multiple issues: use 'one' not the numeral '1' in this context and 'a smaller one' requires the article 'a' (article error ID 22). 'Full length' should be hyphenated as 'full-length' when used as a compound adjective (word order/adjective form ID 18). Remove repeated 'my and' and replace with 'see how I look overall' for clarity (sentence structure ID 26). Suggestion: use clear noun phrases, hyphenate compound adjectives and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID: 22