Relax— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer in a complete sentence and add a specific reason or activity. Use the natural phrase “at home” rather than “at my home.” A topic sentence followed by one supporting detail would make your response clearer and more effective.

예시: I usually relax at home, especially in my bedroom. It is quiet there, so I can lie down and watch a film after a busy day.

제안: The answer does not directly and clearly identify who you relax with, and “I didn't like with my friend” is grammatically incorrect. Say “I usually relax with my friends,” or explain that you prefer relaxing alone. Use the present tense, correct collocations such as “play games,” and avoid exaggeration unless it is clearly intended.

예시: I usually relax with one of my close friends. We sometimes play video games together, but we take breaks so that we do not spend all day playing.

제안: Give a complete opinion and explain what you mean by “adult music,” because the current answer is unclear. You could say that you prefer a particular type of music, or explain why music is not relaxing for you. Use a linking word such as “because” to connect your opinion and reason.

예시: Yes, I think listening to music is relaxing because it helps me forget about stress. I usually listen to soft pop or instrumental music before I go to bed.

제안: Answer the question directly with a complete sentence and use the correct expression “play games,” not “per game.” Avoid saying “24 hours,” which sounds unrealistic; instead, mention how long you usually play and add another relaxing activity or reason.

예시: I usually play video games for about an hour to relax. They help me take my mind off my studies, and afterwards I sometimes listen to music or go for a short walk.

× I didn't like with my friend because I can play game with him twenty four hours

✓ I like relaxing with my friend because I can play games with him for twenty-four hours.

The question asks about what you usually do, so the present-tense verb like is required instead of the past-tense form didn't like.

× I didn't like with my friend because I can play game with him twenty four hours

✓ I like relaxing with my friend because I can play games with him for twenty-four hours.

The noun game should be plural because the speaker is referring to games in general, not one specific game.

× I didn't like with my friend because I can play game with him twenty four hours

✓ I like relaxing with my friend because I can play games with him for twenty-four hours.

The duration twenty-four hours requires the preposition for. The phrase for twenty-four hours shows how long the activity continues.

× I didn't like with my friend because I can play game with him twenty four hours

✓ I like relaxing with my friend because I can play games with him for twenty-four hours.

Like cannot be followed directly by with in this sentence. Use the structure like relaxing with someone to express enjoyment of spending time with that person.

× No because adulthood music

✓ No, because adult music is not relaxing.

The original sentence does not contain a main verb. The verb is is needed to connect the subject adult music with the adjective relaxing.

× No because adulthood music

✓ No, because adult music is not relaxing.

Adulthood is a noun referring to the state of being an adult. The adjective adult is needed to describe the type of music.

× Per game twenty four hour

✓ I play games for twenty-four hours to relax.

The original answer is a fragment and has no subject or main verb. A complete sentence needs a subject, such as I, and a verb, such as play.

× Per game twenty four hour

✓ I play games for twenty-four hours to relax.

Games should be plural because the answer refers to playing games generally.

× Per game twenty four hour

✓ I play games for twenty-four hours to relax.

Per is incorrect for expressing duration in this sentence. Use for before a period of time, as in for twenty-four hours.