Relax— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise: state the place clearly, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (verb forms, articles) and avoid redundancy. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I usually go to the beach to relax. The sound and sight of the waves calm me, and the fresh sea air helps me forget my worries. Because it’s peaceful there, I often spend an hour walking along the shore when I’m stressed.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief reason using a linking word. Fix verb tense and awkward phrasing (e.g., “when I saw this”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I usually relax alone. I prefer solitude because it lets me reflect on my problems and think of solutions without distractions.

제안: Make the response clearer and more organized: state your general opinion, then give specific alternatives and an example. Remove filler words and repetition. Use linking words like 'however' or 'instead' for contrast.

예시: I find music relaxing sometimes, but not always. Instead of music, I often watch films or listen to recitations of the Quran, which I find especially comforting when I’m very stressed.

제안: Give a clear, direct answer and avoid confusing or incorrect descriptions (e.g., don’t call the Quran a ‘horror book’). Use correct nouns and grammar, state one or two activities and explain briefly why they help you relax.

예시: One of the best ways I relax is by listening to recitations of the Quran. I find the rhythm and meaning calming, and it helps me feel peaceful after a stressful day.

× I think I always like to places to visit when I'm stressed to relax.

✓ I think I always like to visit places when I'm stressed to relax.

The original sentence has an incorrect word order and unnecessary preposition 'to' before 'places'. Use the verb 'visit' directly with 'places'. Also 'to relax' should follow to indicate purpose. Suggestion: 'I always like to visit places when I'm stressed to relax.'

× So for example, I always like to go to the beach to look how the waves the water moved from MacLeafs.

✓ For example, I always like to go to the beach to watch how the waves move in the water.

Use 'watch' rather than 'look' for observing movement. 'How the waves the water moved' is ungrammatical; correct structure is 'how the waves move in the water.' Remove 'from MacLeafs' as it is unclear; if it refers to a place, specify correctly.

× So I feel like it's so relieving and so refreshing for me and I would like to go there whenever I have stress.

✓ I feel like it's very relaxing and refreshing for me, and I like to go there whenever I'm stressed.

Use 'relaxing' instead of the noun 'relieving' here. 'Whenever I have stress' is better phrased as 'whenever I'm stressed.' Replace 'would like to' with 'like to' for habitual action.

× Honestly when I saw this I prefer to go alone because I think it's where I can be myself and think about what is going on in my life and maybe look for a solution by myself.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to go alone because I think it's where I can be myself and think about what is going on in my life and maybe look for a solution by myself.

'When I saw this' is incorrect in context; the present preference should be stated 'I prefer.' Remove 'when I saw this'. Ensure present tense for habitual preference.

× Yeah, I think I think so sometimes but for me I don't always listen to music when I have some space so I always maybe watch movies or I say listen to my my holy book which is Quran.

✓ Yes, I think so sometimes, but I don't always listen to music when I have free time; I might watch movies or listen to my holy book, the Quran.

Reduce repetition ('I think I think'), use 'free time' instead of 'some space.' 'Always maybe' is contradictory; use 'might' or 'sometimes.' 'I say listen to my my holy book' is ungrammatical—use 'listen to my holy book, the Quran.'

× So there are some people who recite Quran, so I always like to listen to that when I'm very stressed.

✓ Some people recite the Quran, so I always like to listen to it when I'm very stressed.

Use the article 'the' with 'Quran.' Use the pronoun 'it' rather than 'that' to refer to the Quran. Combine clauses for simplicity.

× One of phrases the best way for me to relax is maybe to just listen to Quaran Arya which is a horror book because I'm Muslim.

✓ One of the best ways for me to relax is to listen to the Quran recitation, because I'm Muslim.

Original has multiple errors: 'One of phrases the best way' is ungrammatical—use 'One of the best ways.' 'Quaran Arya' is unclear; if intending 'Quran recitation' use that. The Quran is not a 'horror book'; remove incorrect description. Keep cultural accuracy.

× So I think that's more better compared to other things in my opinions.

✓ So I think that's better than other things, in my opinion.

'More better' is redundant; use 'better.' 'Compared to' can be 'than' for comparison. 'In my opinions' should be singular 'in my opinion.'