Relax— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, keep it concise (max 5 sentences), use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Add a linking word to connect reason.

예시: I usually relax at the park near my house. When I feel tired or stressed after studying, I go there to read a book and enjoy the fresh air because it helps me relax and clear my mind.

제안: Good direct response and relevant details. Improve natural phrasing (use plural nouns and articles), add a linking word to show result, and give a brief specific example to make it more vivid.

예시: I usually relax with my friends. For example, after school we often listen to music or play video games together, which helps us unwind and strengthens our friendship.

제안: Answer the question directly, correct grammar and word choice, and avoid repetition. Provide a short reason with a clear linking word. Correct the phrase about the song (e.g., ‘because of its calm melody’).

예시: Yes, I do. I often listen to music when I feel tired or stressed because it helps me forget my problems. My favorite song is “Life Goes On” by BTS because of its calm, comforting melody.

제안: Use correct verbs and word forms, begin with a clear topic sentence, and use linking words for additional details. Be slightly more specific (how often, or a brief effect).

예시: I usually relax outdoors by playing badminton or football with my friends. I also like to swim sometimes, because exercising and being in the fresh air helps me unwind and feel more energetic.

× Recently when I feel tired or stressed after studying, I go there to read a book and enjoy the fresh air because it's have me relax and clear my mind.

✓ Recently when I feel tired or stressed after studying, I go there to read a book and enjoy the fresh air because it helps me relax and clear my mind.

The phrase 'it's have me relax' is grammatically incorrect. The intended meaning requires a present simple verb 'helps' to indicate a habitual or general effect of the fresh air. Use 'it helps me relax' rather than 'it's have me relax'. Suggestion: replace 'it's have' with 'it helps' to show cause and effect in present simple.

× I usually relax with my friends. We often listen to music together or play video games after school because it helps us relax and strengthen friendship.

✓ I usually relax with my friends. We often listen to music together or play video games after school because it helps us relax and strengthen our friendship.

The noun 'friendship' here needs a determiner to show whose friendship is meant. Use the possessive adjective 'our' to indicate the friendship between the speaker and friends. Suggestion: add 'our' before 'friendship'.

× Yes I do, I always listen to music when I feel tired, stressed, or after school because it helps me forget about my problems. My favorite song is Life Goes on by BTS because it came melody.

✓ Yes I do. I always listen to music when I feel tired, stressed, or after school because it helps me forget about my problems. My favorite song is 'Life Goes On' by BTS because it has a beautiful melody.

The phrase 'it came melody' is incorrect. Likely intended is 'it has a ... melody'. Use present simple 'has' to describe a song's characteristic and choose an appropriate adjective like 'beautiful'. Also corrected punctuation by splitting into sentences and capitalizing the song title. Suggestion: use 'it has a beautiful melody' to describe the song.

× I usually relate outdoors by playing badminton or football with friends.

✓ I usually relax outdoors by playing badminton or football with friends.

The verb 'relate' is incorrect in this context; the intended verb is 'relax'. This is a word choice error causing an incorrect sentence structure. Replace 'relate' with 'relax' to match the meaning of unwinding outdoors. Suggestion: check verb choice to ensure it matches intended meaning.

× I also like to swim sometimes because exercising and being in the fresh air helps me unwind.

✓ I also like to swim sometimes because exercise and being in the fresh air help me unwind.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'exercising and being in the fresh air' is a compound subject (two activities), so the verb should be plural 'help' not singular 'helps'. Recasting 'exercising' as the noun 'exercise' is also natural. Suggestion: use plural verb 'help' with compound subjects or rephrase to maintain agreement.