Relax— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more grammatically accurate, concise, and add a clear topic sentence followed by one specific detail. Use correct verb forms and articles, and one linking phrase for coherence.

예시: Recently I often go to the park to relax. The air there is fresh and there are fewer people, so I can enjoy my personal space and listen to music peacefully.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, infinitives) and one linking phrase to explain why. Be specific about how you relax alone.

예시: I usually relax by myself because I enjoy the quiet atmosphere. For example, I put on my earphones and listen to calming melodies so I am not distracted by other people.

제안: Provide a concise topic sentence, then give one clear reason and a brief example. Correct verb forms and noun phrases (e.g., 'I really enjoy listening to music', 'it contributes to my mental well-being'). Use a linking word like 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I find listening to music very relaxing because it calms me and helps my mental well-being. For example, when I am stressed after a busy day at work, I play soft music to help me unwind.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence listing one or two activities, then briefly explain how each helps. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (infinitives, articles, 'relieve stress', 'contribute to my mental well-being'). Use a linking word such as 'also' or 'in addition'.

예시: To relax, I usually listen to music and also do some light exercise. Listening to music helps me calm down, and exercising releases tension and improves my mood.

× 'I go to the park for relax myself recently because the air is good and that less people disturbing me and I enjoy my personal space and time for listening music.'

✓ 'I have been going to the park recently to relax because the air is good, there are fewer people disturbing me, and I enjoy my personal space and time to listen to music.'

'Sentence structure errors: The original mixes tenses and uses incorrect infinitive and gerund forms (for relax myself, for listening music). Use present perfect progressive to show a recent habitual action (have been going). Use to + base verb for purpose (to relax, to listen). Replace that less people disturbing me with there are fewer people disturbing me to form a complete clause and use fewer for countable people.'

× 'that less people disturbing me'

✓ 'there are fewer people disturbing me'

'Singular and plural issue: "people" is plural, so use plural agreement with "are" and use "fewer" for a countable noun rather than "less".'

× 'for listening music'

✓ 'to listen to music'

'Verb + -ing form: After expressions of purpose use to + base verb (to listen). Also include the preposition to after listen (listen to music).'

× 'for relax myself recently'

✓ 'to relax recently'

'Incorrect use of pronouns: Reflexive pronoun "myself" is unnecessary here. Use the infinitive of purpose (to relax) and keep the adverb "recently" with the verb phrase.'

× 'Personally, I usually relax myself because I enjoy the atmosphere.'

✓ 'Personally, I usually relax alone because I enjoy the atmosphere.'

'Sentence structure errors: "Relax myself" is unnatural; use "relax alone" or simply "relax". "Alone" clarifies doing it by oneself.'

× 'When I stay alone, there\'s no one can disturbing me.'

✓ 'When I stay alone, there is no one to disturb me.'

'Incorrect passive voice / sentence structure: "no one can disturbing me" is ungrammatical. Use "no one to disturb me" or "no one who can disturb me"; keep the infinitive or a correct relative clause.'

× 'I prefer to listen to music with my earphone and enjoy the melody without people noisy.'

✓ 'I prefer to listen to music with my earphones and enjoy the melody without people being noisy.'

'Verb + -ing form and word choice: "earphone" should be plural "earphones". "without people noisy" is incorrect; use "without people being noisy" or "without noisy people".'

× 'Absolutely, I am really enjoy listen to the music because it made me feel comfortable and contribute my mental health well-being.'

✓ 'Absolutely, I really enjoy listening to music because it makes me feel comfortable and contributes to my mental well-being.'

'Present tense issue and verb forms: Use simple present "I really enjoy" for general truth. Use gerund "listening" after enjoy. "it made me feel" should be present "it makes me feel". Use third-person singular verb "contributes" and correct noun phrase "mental well-being" with preposition "to".'

× 'I am really enjoy listen to the music'

✓ 'I really enjoy listening to music'

'Verb + -ing form: After "enjoy" use the -ing form (enjoy listening). Also omit unnecessary "am" when using simple present.'

× 'because it made me feel comfortable'

✓ 'because it makes me feel comfortable'

'Past tense issue: The sentence expresses a general/current effect, so use present simple "makes", not past "made".'

× 'For example when I get stressed after work I always listen to music for make me feel better especially after whole day busy.'

✓ 'For example, when I get stressed after work I always listen to music to make myself feel better, especially after a busy day.'

'Sentence structure and verb forms: Use "to make myself feel better" for purpose and include the reflexive pronoun "myself" appropriately. Add articles "a busy day" and commas for clarity.'

× 'especially after whole day busy'

✓ 'especially after a busy day'

'Incorrect use of prepositions/articles: Add the article "a" and change word order to the adjective before noun: "a busy day".'

× 'Well for me sometimes I listen to music for relax to relax and I do some exercise for relieve my stress.'

✓ 'Well, sometimes I listen to music to relax, and I do some exercises to relieve my stress.'

'Sentence structure errors: Remove redundancy (for relax to relax). Use to + verb for purpose (to relax, to relieve). Use plural "exercises" for general activities.'

× 'It contribute on my mental health being well-being.'

✓ 'It contributes to my mental well-being.'

'Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and prepositions: Use third-person singular "contributes" and preposition "to". Use the established noun phrase "mental well-being" rather than the incorrect sequence.'