Relax— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (past tense and verb forms), use a clear topic sentence, shorten to under 5 sentences, and add one specific detail. Use linking words for coherence.

예시: Recently I went to the park near my house to walk around the lake. I felt very relaxed because the air was fresh and there were few people. Also, watching ducks on the water helped me forget my worries.

제안: Correct pronoun and verb errors, give a clear topic sentence, and provide one specific reason using a linking word for clarity.

예시: I usually relax with my friends. However, in the summer I relax more often with my sister because many of my friends travel away from town.

제안: Fix tense and modal usage, avoid redundancy, and give a concise reason with a linking word. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'calming' instead of 'chill').

예시: Yes, I find music relaxing. For example, when it rains and I cannot go outside, I listen to calming acoustic songs to unwind.

제안: Organize into a clear topic sentence and two brief supporting sentences linked by transition words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'talk to a friend'). Be specific about types of TV shows or places you go out to for clarity.

예시: It depends on my mood. If I'm sad, I usually talk to a close friend to share my feelings; if I'm stressed from work or school, I prefer watching a light comedy or going for a short walk in a nearby cafe area to clear my mind.

× Yesterday I go to the park near my house to walking around the lake and I feel very relaxed because the air are very fresh and I can let my head out.

✓ Yesterday I went to the park near my house to walk around the lake and I felt very relaxed because the air was very fresh and I could clear my head.

Multiple tense and verb form errors: 'go' should be past 'went' to match 'Yesterday' (past tense). 'to walking' is incorrect infinitive use; use base form 'to walk'. 'I feel' should be past 'I felt' for consistency. 'the air are' has subject-verb agreement; 'air' is singular uncountable so use 'was'. 'I can let my head out' is idiomaticly incorrect; use 'I could clear my head' in past. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense for past events and use correct infinitive forms and subject-verb agreement.

× Sometime I you go to relax with my friend, but in the summer I usually go to relax with my sister because all my friends are far from my house.

✓ Sometimes I go to relax with my friend, but in the summer I usually go with my sister because all my friends live far from my house.

Errors: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' (adverb meaning occasionally). Extra word 'you' is incorrect and must be removed. 'go to relax with' is wordy; use 'go to relax with' simplified to 'go with' or 'go to relax with'—here 'go with my sister' is natural. 'are far from my house' is acceptable but 'live far from my house' is clearer. Suggestion: use correct adverb 'sometimes', remove stray words, and prefer 'live far from' for clarity.

× Yes, sometime when the weather will rain, I prefer listening to music to relax because in that time I can't go out and music is the thing I love, so I feel very chill.

✓ Yes, sometimes when it is going to rain, I prefer listening to music to relax because at that time I can't go out and music is something I love, so I feel very relaxed.

'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Using 'will' in subordinate time clause 'when the weather will rain' is incorrect in English; use present tense or 'is going to' for future intention: 'when it is going to rain' or 'when it rains'. 'in that time' should be 'at that time'. 'music is the thing I love' is awkward; use 'music is something I love'. 'feel very chill' is informal; use 'feel very relaxed'. Suggestion: use correct time clause forms, appropriate prepositions, and natural adjectives.

× It depends on my mood, if I'm sad and have story to tell I will relax by chatting my friend or when I'm stressed with work or school I will. I prefer watching TV or going out.

✓ It depends on my mood. If I'm sad and have a story to tell, I will relax by chatting with my friend. When I'm stressed with work or school, I prefer watching TV or going out.

Run-on and incomplete sentences: original mixes clauses incorrectly and omits articles and prepositions. 'have story' needs an article: 'have a story'. 'chatting my friend' requires preposition 'with'. The clause 'or when I'm stressed ... I will.' is incomplete; 'I will' needs an object or should be rephrased to 'I prefer'. Splitting into separate sentences improves clarity and grammatical completeness. Suggestion: add necessary articles, prepositions, and ensure each clause has a complete verb phrase.