Language— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời đã rõ ràng nhưng cần ngắn gọn hơn, cấu trúc mạch lạc hơn và thêm một câu chủ đề trực tiếp. Tránh lặp ý (ví dụ “studying Chinese”/“I really want to go to Shanghai” có thể gộp). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý và thêm chi tiết cụ thể (mức độ thành thạo, thời gian học).

예시: I speak Vietnamese (my mother tongue), English and some Chinese. I'm currently studying Chinese because I hope to live in Shanghai for a year, and I study English to improve my career prospects. I can speak conversational English and beginner-level Chinese.

제안: Ý chính rõ ràng và logic; tuy nhiên cần rút gọn câu dài, tránh dùng từ mơ hồ như “maybe”, và thêm ví dụ cụ thể để minh họa khó khăn (ví dụ: phát âm, ngữ pháp). Dùng liên từ để làm rõ cấu trúc lý do-kết quả.

예시: Yes, I think learning a new language is difficult because each language has different grammar and sounds. For example, tones in Chinese and unfamiliar consonant clusters in English are hard for many learners, so achieving fluency often takes years of practice.

제안: Cần chỉnh ngữ pháp (ví dụ ‘if I has a chance’ → ‘if I have the chance’) và rút gọn để mạch lạc. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes/No/Maybe) rồi giải thích bằng lý do ngắn gọn và cụ thể (khung thời gian, mục tiêu học thêm).

예시: Maybe, but not at the moment because I'm busy studying Chinese and English. If I have more free time in the future, I would like to learn Korean because I'm interested in Korean culture and music.

제안: Lời giải thích hợp lý nhưng có phần tổng quát và hơi tuyệt đối (“everyone needs”). Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ công việc hoặc ngành học). Tránh lặp từ và dùng từ phù hợp (’foreigners’ → ’people from other countries’).

예시: I learn English because it's the international lingua franca and it helps with studying abroad and finding better jobs. For instance, many of the engineering journals I read are in English, so improving my English boosts my academic and career opportunities.

× I'm currently studying Chinese because I really want to go to Shanghai and I'm studying English for my future career.

✓ I'm currently studying Chinese because I really want to go to Shanghai, and I'm studying English for my future career.

Comma should join two coordinated independent clauses; this is punctuation/structure but relates to present continuous usage which is correct. Suggest adding a comma before 'and' to improve sentence flow. Use present continuous correctly for ongoing actions.

× Each language has its own grammar and sentence structure, and maybe some different sounds that some learners find hard to pronounce, so I think it can take a long time to become fluent.

✓ Each language has its own grammar and sentence structure, and some different sounds that learners may find hard to pronounce, so I think it can take a long time to become fluent.

Replace 'maybe some different sounds that some learners find hard' with 'some different sounds that learners may find hard' to avoid repetition and use modal 'may' for possibility. Present tense 'has' and 'find' are correct; improve word choice and clarity.

× Maybe if I have more time to spend because I'm spending my time learning Chinese and English now so I think I won't have spare time to learn another one.

✓ Maybe if I have more time to spare, because I'm spending my time learning Chinese and English now, I don't think I'll have spare time to learn another language.

Change 'to spend' to 'to spare' for natural collocation and restructure sentence for clarity. 'I won't have' conflicts with conditional timing; 'I don't think I'll have' is more natural. Use 'language' instead of 'one' for clarity.

× But if I has a chance I really want to learn Korean.

✓ But if I have a chance, I really want to learn Korean.

Use 'have' with subject 'I'; 'has' is third person singular and incorrect here. Add comma after the conditional clause for readability.

× Without a doubt, because it's the international language, everyone needs to learn English to communicate with the foreigners and also if they want to have a better academic performance as well as a good career path.

✓ Without a doubt, because it's the international language, everyone needs to learn English to communicate with foreigners and to have better academic performance as well as a good career path.

Remove the definite article before 'foreigners' unless referring to specific foreigners. Also improve parallel structure: use 'to have' consistently and omit 'a' before 'better academic performance'.