Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

예시: Yes — I enjoy science because it helps me understand how the world works. For example, I often watch science TV programs and YouTube channels about physics, which use simple experiments to explain complex ideas clearly.

제안: Organize the answer: give a clear time reference, then two specific examples. Avoid repetitions and filler words, and correct tense and article errors. Use linking words (for example, besides, also) to connect ideas and make the sequence logical.

예시: I started learning about science in primary school, around first or second grade. For example, we did simple experiments like mixing vinegar and baking soda to observe chemical reactions, and we grew plants to study how light affects growth. I was also curious about natural phenomena such as rainbows and why the sky is blue.

제안: Good clear topic sentence and relevant supporting detail. Improve by varying vocabulary and tightening phrasing; avoid repeating ideas (e.g., 'helps me understand' and 'explain'). Add a brief specific example to show depth.

예시: I find physics most interesting because it explains why objects move and how forces operate in the universe. For example, learning about electromagnetism helped me understand how electric motors and smartphones work.

제안: Clarify and correct sentences, remove unclear phrases, and give two concise, specific examples. Use linking words (for example, also) and precise vocabulary (e.g., 'built a simple circuit').

예시: At school I did several simple experiments. For example, I mixed vinegar and baking soda to observe the chemical reaction, and I also built a small circuit with a battery, wires and a bulb to learn about electricity.

제안: Fix grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and avoid hesitation. Be concise: give one reason and one specific example (channel or episode). Use linking words (for example, also) and clearer phrases ('interviews with scientists').

예시: Yes, I love watching science TV programs because they expand my knowledge and report new discoveries. For example, the channel 'Earth Planet' features demonstrations of experiments and interviews with scientists about their research.

제안: Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases. Start with a clear direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons. Correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and remove repetitions and fillers. Use precise vocabulary ('parents', 'children', 'learn about science').

예시: Yes, I think many Chinese people visit science museums, often bringing their children. Parents take their kids to learn about experiments and scientific concepts in a hands-on way.

× Yes, I really enjoy science because it helps me understand how things works.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy science because it helps me understand how things work.

The subject 'things' is plural, so the verb should be the base form 'work' rather than 'works'. Use plural verb form to agree with a plural subject. Suggestion: Remember that plural nouns take the base verb (they work, the cars run).

× I often work often learn from science TV programs and YouTube videos, especially those about physics and simple experiments which make complex ideas easy to follow.

✓ I often learn from science TV programs and YouTube videos, especially those about physics and simple experiments that make complex ideas easy to follow.

The sentence had a repeated word 'work often' and used 'which' acceptable but 'that' sounds more natural for defining clause. Remove the extra word and use 'that' for essential information. Suggestion: Read sentences aloud to catch accidental repetitions and choose 'that' for restrictive clauses.

× I started learning about science in my primary school around first or second grade.

✓ I started learning about science in primary school, around first or second grade.

The original is mostly correct but 'my primary school' is unnatural in this context; use 'primary school'. Also add a comma for clarity. Tense 'started' correctly marks past. Suggestion: Use simpler phrasing 'in primary school' for general schooling references.

× I remember I have done simple doing simple experiments, for example, mixing vinegar with the mixing vinegar with the soda, soda to see the reaction and moreover growing plant and see how the lights uh how much of the light it tells us.

✓ I remember doing simple experiments, for example mixing vinegar with baking soda to see the reaction, and also growing plants to observe how light affects them.

The original has pronoun/phrase repetition and incorrect or missing nouns ('baking soda', plural 'plants'), plus awkward structure. Use gerund 'doing' after 'remember' and correct noun forms. Cleanly separate examples with commas. Suggestion: Use parallel structures for lists and ensure correct noun forms and common collocations (baking soda, growing plants).

× I also remember I was so curious about how rainbow forms and how why the cloud color is blue.

✓ I also remember being curious about how rainbows form and why the sky is blue.

Use gerund 'being' after 'remember'. 'Rainbow' should be plural or 'a rainbow' and the usual phrase is 'why the sky is blue' rather than 'why the cloud color is blue'. Remove redundant 'how why'. Suggestion: Use standard expressions ('why the sky is blue') and avoid repeating question words.

× Physics is the most interesting subject for me because it helps me understand why things move and how things happen in the universe.

✓ Physics is the most interesting subject for me because it helps me understand why things move and how events occur in the universe.

Original is acceptable but 'how things happen' is vague; 'how events occur' is clearer and more formal. No tense problem. Suggestion: Choose precise nouns ('events') for clarity.

× Moreover, it's very fascinating for me to see that physics principles explain technology and much of the universe, for example, how the electromagnetism enables modern devices.

✓ Moreover, I find it fascinating that physical principles explain technology and much of the universe, for example how electromagnetism enables modern devices.

Replace 'it's very fascinating for me to see that' with 'I find it fascinating that' for natural phrasing. 'Physics principles' changed to 'physical principles' and remove 'the' before 'electromagnetism'. Suggestion: Use concise subject-verb structures ('I find it fascinating that ...') and proper article use with uncountable nouns.

× I remember doing your several experiments at my school.

✓ I remember doing several experiments at my school.

The word 'your' is incorrect here; likely mis-said. Remove it to make a grammatically correct sentence. Suggestion: Ensure possessive pronouns correctly refer to the subject; here none is needed.

× For example, I'm very small by using vinegar and soda to see the chemical reaction in action.

✓ For example, when I was very young I used vinegar and baking soda to see the chemical reaction in action.

'I'm very small' is wrong tense and meaning; should be past 'when I was very young'. Also 'soda' should be 'baking soda'. Suggestion: Match tense to the time being described and use common compound names (baking soda).

× Moreover, I have made a small circuit by using bulbs and wires and batteries and to see low product hardware.

✓ Moreover, I made a small circuit using bulbs, wires, and a battery to learn about simple electronic devices.

Use past simple 'made' to match narrative. 'Batteries' singular 'a battery' is fine, and 'low product hardware' is unclear; replace with 'simple electronic devices'. Suggestion: Keep sentence concise and use clear, standard terms.

× Yes, I love watching science TV program this because it enhance my knowledge and tells about new discoveries that happen.

✓ Yes, I love watching science TV programs because they enhance my knowledge and report new discoveries.

Use plural 'programs' or 'a science TV program'. Subject-verb agreement: 'they enhance' not 'it enhance'. 'Tell about' is unnatural; 'report' or 'present' is better. Suggestion: Ensure number agreement between subject and verb and choose appropriate verbs for media (report, present).

× Moreover, there are the there is a channel called Earth Planet which shows the how experiments took place.

✓ There is a channel called Earth Planet which shows how experiments are conducted.

Original repeated 'there are the there is' and used past tense 'took place' awkwardly. Use present simple 'are conducted' for program content. Suggestion: Avoid word repetition and choose tense that describes show content (present simple).

× Uh, and moreover took some of the interviews of some scientists who have done new experience.

✓ It also includes interviews with scientists who have made new discoveries.

Replace awkward passive/incorrect phrasing 'took some of the interviews of some scientists who have done new experience' with natural 'includes interviews with scientists who have made new discoveries.' Use present simple for program content and present perfect for recent discoveries. Suggestion: Use idiomatic collocations ('interviews with', 'made discoveries').

× In my perception, yes. Just do giants. Chinese people visit to science museums, uh, with their with their children's as they want their children to learn more about scientific experiments and gain knowledge about how things works and how expensive takes place.

✓ In my view, yes. Many Chinese people visit science museums with their children because they want them to learn more about scientific experiments and gain knowledge about how things work and how experiments take place.

Multiple errors: 'In my perception' better as 'In my view'; remove nonsensical 'Just do giants.' 'Visit to' should be 'visit' and 'children's' incorrect possessive; use 'children'. Subject-verb agreement 'how things work' not 'works' and 'how experiments take place' not 'expensive'. Suggestion: Use standard phrases ('in my view'), correct verb forms, and avoid stray words. Proofread for nonsensical insertions.