Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear, relevant and gives an example, but it is slightly long and has minor grammatical issues (e.g., "how cells, different cells in a tissue work together"). To improve, make the topic sentence concise, correct small grammar errors, and use a linking phrase before the example. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

예시: Yes, I enjoy science, especially reading scientific articles because they explain how the world works. For example, I am fascinated by how different types of cells in a tissue communicate to perform specific functions.

제안: Good direct answer with personal detail and specific examples. To improve further, include a linking word to connect the observation to your interest and refine phrasing (e.g., "these observations" instead of repeating). Keep sentences concise and natural.

예시: I've been interested in science since childhood because I used to watch how trees changed with the seasons. These observations, along with animal behaviour, sparked many questions that made me curious about science.

제안: The answer states a clear preference and reason, but the sentence is slightly awkward ("and leveraging engineering tools"). Improve by using a smoother structure, a linking word, and one concrete example of an application to be more specific.

예시: I enjoy biomedical science because it blends biology with engineering. For instance, engineers design medical devices and biomaterials that help develop new treatments for diseases.

제안: This is a specific and relevant example, which is excellent. To improve, add a brief explanation of purpose or result and use plural agreement ("different strengths and hardnesses" or better: "different strengths and levels of hardness"). Use a linking phrase if you add more detail.

예시: One memorable experiment I did was creating hydrogels with different strengths and levels of hardness by altering their chemistry, to test which formulation best mimicked natural tissue for potential medical use.

제안: Your answer is relevant and gives a reason, but it is somewhat repetitive ("apply in nature" and "explain natural events"). Combine ideas to be more concise and use a linking word for flow.

예시: Yes, I enjoy science programs about nature and medicine because they show how scientific principles explain natural events and medical discoveries, making complex ideas easier to understand.

제안: The meaning is unclear and there is a contradiction: you say "Yes" then write "it is uncommon activity". Also grammar and phrasing need correction. Clarify whether it is common or uncommon, use correct articles and tense, and give a brief reason or example to support your view.

예시: In my experience, many Chinese parents do take their children to science museums to introduce basic scientific ideas early on, especially on school trips or weekends, because these visits are seen as educational and fun.

× For example, how cells, different cells in a tissue work together is very fascinating for me.

✓ For example, how different cells in a tissue work together is very fascinating to me.

The issue involves word order and a preposition/adjective choice. 'Cells, different cells in a tissue' is awkward; reordering to 'different cells in a tissue' makes the noun phrase clear. Also use 'fascinating to me' rather than 'for me' when describing personal reaction to a fact. Suggestion: place adjectives before nouns and use 'fascinating to me' when expressing personal response.

× Observing how trees change during different seasons and how animals or insects behave created a lot of questions in my head.

✓ Observing how trees change during different seasons and how animals or insects behave created a lot of questions in my mind.

The phrase 'in my head' is idiomatic but 'in my mind' is more natural here. The tense 'created' is acceptable because the speaker refers to past initiation of interest; no tense change needed. Suggestion: prefer 'in my mind' for thoughts and questions.

× I particularly like biomedical science because it combines engineering concepts with biology and leveraging engineering tools to develop treatments for diseases or understand biology.

✓ I particularly like biomedical science because it combines engineering concepts with biology and leverages engineering tools to develop treatments for diseases and to understand biology.

Parallel structure error: after 'combines' the coordinate verb phrase should match in form. 'Leveraging' (a gerund) does not match 'combines' (a finite verb). Change to 'leverages' to maintain parallel finite verbs and add 'to' for the second purpose. Suggestion: keep verbs in parallel forms in coordinated clauses.

× One of the most interesting experiments I have done was to create hydrogel with different strengths and hardness by changing its chemistry.

✓ One of the most interesting experiments I have done was creating hydrogels with different strengths and hardnesses by changing their chemistry.

Several issues: 'was to create' vs 'was creating' — both possible, but using a gerund matches 'one of the experiments ... was creating' more naturally. Also 'hydrogel' should be plural 'hydrogels' if referring to different samples, and 'hardness' should become plural 'hardnesses' to match 'different'. Pronoun agreement: 'its chemistry' unclear — use 'their chemistry' to match plural. Suggestion: ensure number agreement and parallel noun pluralization.

× It is fascinating to see how scientific principles apply in nature and we can explain natural events with scientific concepts.

✓ It is fascinating to see how scientific principles apply in nature and how we can explain natural events with scientific concepts.

Sentence lacks parallel structure and a conjunction 'how' before the second clause to mirror the first clause 'how scientific principles apply'. Adding 'how' creates parallelism and clarity. Suggestion: maintain parallel clause structure when connecting similar ideas.

× Yes, it is uncommon activity for parents to take their kids to Science Museum to familiarize them since childhood with scientific concepts and how things work around us.

✓ Yes, it is uncommon for parents to take their kids to science museums to familiarize them with scientific concepts and how things work from childhood.

Problems include quantifier and article use: 'uncommon activity' is incorrect; use 'uncommon for parents' or 'an uncommon activity'. 'Science Museum' should be lowercase 'science museums' and plural if speaking generally. Word order 'to familiarize them since childhood with' is awkward; move 'from childhood' or 'since childhood' earlier: 'to familiarize them with ... from childhood'. Suggestion: use correct collocations ('uncommon for', 'science museums') and place time expressions ('from childhood') appropriately.