Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct minor grammar (e.g., "I would like to work in").

예시: Yes, I really enjoy science and hope to work in that field in the future. For example, I'm considering biochemistry or neuropsychology because I find how the brain and molecules interact fascinating.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, then add specific timeline details and improve grammar and phrasing (e.g., "I started in third grade at school and also attended a Science and Arts Center"). Use linking words like "and" or "since then" correctly.

예시: I started learning about science in third grade. I also attended a Science and Arts Center in Turkey, and since then I've continued studying science through school clubs and personal projects.

제안: Begin with a clear, concise statement and follow with one specific example to support it. Use present tense for current interests and correct articles and word forms ("the subject that interests me most").

예시: Biology interests me the most. For instance, I worked on a biology project developing vegan food products, which taught me a lot about nutrition and sustainable ingredient alternatives.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence, then list two specific examples with brief explanations. Correct vocabulary ("dairies" likely "dairy products"), grammar, and phrasing ("I focused on food sustainability worldwide"). Avoid vague phrases like "so many" and redundant clauses.

예시: I've worked on several science projects, mainly developing dairy and plant-based food products. In particular, I focused on food sustainability, researching ways to reduce waste and create affordable, nutritious alternatives for different countries.

제안: Give a direct answer about science programs, then explain your preference concisely. Improve coherence by using linking words (e.g., "however"), correct collocations ("listen to podcasts"), and avoid contradicting phrases.

예시: I do enjoy science TV programs, but I prefer active learning. For example, rather than watching TV for long periods, I usually listen to podcasts, discuss topics with friends, or do my own research online.

제안: Instead of repeating uncertainty, give a brief honest response and offer a general observation if possible. Use correct negative forms ("I don't know") and avoid awkward phrasing. You can say you have no experience but suggest a reasoned guess if needed.

예시: I'm not sure because I haven't been to China or met many Chinese visitors. However, I would guess that many people there do visit science museums, especially students, as such museums are popular educational destinations.

× Yes, I really like science and in the future I also would like to choose my occupation in the field of science.

✓ Yes, I really like science and in the future I would also like to choose my occupation in the field of science.

The placement of 'also' is awkward; move 'also' after 'would' for natural word order in future modal constructions. Suggestion: 'I would also like' rather than 'I also would like'.

× Now I'm thinking like biochemistry or neuropsychology.

✓ Now I'm thinking of studying biochemistry or neuropsychology.

Use 'thinking of' + gerund to express considering something. 'Like' is incorrect here. Also add 'studying' to clarify the intended action.

× I started in primary school in my school, also at Science and Arts Center in Turkey.

✓ I started in primary school and also at the Science and Arts Center in Turkey.

Redundant phrase 'in my school' is unnecessary; connect clauses with 'and also'. Add definite article 'the' before the center name.

× I attended there at 3rd grade and since then I'm continuously studying on science.

✓ I attended there in 3rd grade and since then I have been continuously studying science.

Use 'in 3rd grade' (preposition), and present perfect continuous 'have been studying' to express an action continuing from past to present. Use 'study science' not 'study on science'.

× Most of the time, biology is the subject that interested me most among all other subjects.

✓ Most of the time, biology is the subject that interests me most among all subjects.

Tense mismatch: 'is' requires present 'interests' not past 'interested'. Also 'among all other subjects' is redundant; use 'among all subjects'.

× Also, I have worked on a project in the field of biology about making vegan products to eat and use.

✓ Also, I worked on a project in the field of biology about making vegan products to eat and use.

Use simple past 'worked' if referring to a completed project. Present perfect 'have worked' could be acceptable, but simple past is clearer when giving past specifics. Either tense must be consistent with surrounding context.

× I have done so many different projects in this field and I produce some dairies, some products and even did some research projects.

✓ I have done many different projects in this field: I produced some dairy products and even conducted some research projects.

Use 'many' not 'so many' (formal), 'dairy products' is correct term rather than 'dairies', and maintain parallel verb forms; use present perfect 'have done' then past 'produced' or use consistent tense. 'Conducted research' is more natural than 'did some research projects'.

× But it I focused on the sustainability in foods among all world, among all the countries in the world.

✓ But I focus on sustainability in food worldwide.

Remove extra 'it'. Use present tense 'focus' to describe current interest. 'Sustainability in foods' -> 'sustainability in food' or 'food sustainability'. 'Among all the countries in the world' is verbose; 'worldwide' is concise.

× I actually totally like watching TV programs.

✓ I actually really like watching TV programs.

'Totally' is informal and unnatural here; 'really' is more natural. This is stylistic but improves register.

× It doesn't matter what is the topic, science or not because I'm not that type of person to sit and watch something.

✓ It doesn't matter whether the topic is science or not, because I'm not the type of person who sits and just watches something.

Use 'whether... or not' and relative clause 'the type of person who sits' for correct structure. 'To sit and watch something' is less natural than 'who sits and just watches'.

× Instead I listen some podcasts or talk with someone or just do some research by myself.

✓ Instead I listen to podcasts, talk with someone, or just do some research by myself.

'Listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by the object 'podcasts'. Use commas for list. 'By myself' is acceptable; could also use 'on my own'.

× I don't know, I don't really know any Chinese people or I haven't been in China or I haven't seen any Chinese people in science museums.

✓ I don't know; I don't really know any Chinese people, I haven't been to China, and I haven't seen Chinese people in science museums.

Use 'been to China' not 'been in China' for visitation. Combine clauses with commas and conjunctions; avoid repeating 'or' and use parallel structure.

× So I don't I can not be able to answer those questions.

✓ So I cannot answer those questions.

'Cannot' is the single negative modal; 'can not be able to' is redundant and ungrammatical. Simplify to 'cannot answer'.