Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), give one brief reason, and add a short positive contrast if needed. Use past tense correctly when referring to school.

예시: No, I don't really like science. When I was at school I found it confusing and difficult, so I preferred art and literature because I felt more interested and motivated by them.

제안: Answer directly with a time reference, use correct verb tense, and avoid fillers. Give one clear detail about what you liked and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: I started learning science in sixth grade at school. At that time I especially enjoyed the practical lessons because they were more hands-on and easier to understand than the theory.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct small errors, and expand briefly with a specific reason or example. Remove repetition and use a linking phrase for the example.

예시: I like biology the most because it teaches about living organisms, such as plants, animals and the human body. For example, I often watch documentaries about wildlife to learn more about animal behaviour.

제안: Structure your answer: start with a brief summary, then give one specific example with clear results. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases. Use linking words (for example, then, so) and precise vocabulary.

예시: I have done simple school experiments and a small biology project, which I found exciting because I observed real results. For example, last year I grew identical plants under different light conditions and measured their height every week to compare which grew faster.

제안: Give a clear affirmative sentence, remove fillers and repeated words, and add one specific program or topic you enjoy. Use a linking phrase to explain why you like them.

예시: Yes, I enjoy watching science TV programs, especially nature documentaries about plants and animals. I like them because they explain complex topics visually and show real-life examples.

제안: Answer directly and then support with two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and use correct grammar. Mention who visits and give a short personal remark using a linking word.

예시: Yes, many people in China visit science museums, particularly students and families. Schools often arrange class trips and parents take children on weekends because the exhibits are interactive and entertaining, and I sometimes go myself when there is a new exhibition.

× No, I don't like science because it is very confusing and tough when I was in school.

✓ No, I don't like science because it was very confusing and tough when I was in school.

The time reference 'when I was in school' places the description in the past, so the verb describing that past state should be in the past tense ('was') rather than the present ('is'). Use past tense to keep time reference consistent.

× I like I like the art and literature subject because I have more interest in those subjects.

✓ I like art and literature because I am more interested in those subjects.

Redundant repetition 'I like I like' should be removed. 'The art and literature subject' is awkward; use plural 'art and literature' or 'these subjects'. 'I have more interest' is unnatural; use the adjective 'interested' with 'more' or 'more interested in'. This fixes pronoun/reference and phrasing.

× When I was in school I learn about science from class 6th.

✓ When I was in school I learned about science from class 6.

The clause 'When I was in school' refers to the past, so the verb should be past tense ('learned'), not present ('learn'). Also 'class 6th' is better expressed as 'class 6' or 'the sixth grade'.

× We we learned science and I just I I have only interest in science practicals because practicals are interesting rather than theory.

✓ We learned science, and I only had an interest in science practicals because practicals were more interesting than theory.

Remove repeated words 'We we' and 'I just I I'. Use past tense 'learned' and 'had' to match 'When I was in school'. 'Only interest in' should be 'only had an interest in'. Compare items with 'more interesting than' to make the comparison grammatical.

× I love I like biology because it gives us knowledge about living things like plants, animal and human bodies.

✓ I like biology because it gives us knowledge about living things like plants, animals, and the human body.

Remove repeated 'I love I like'. Use plural 'animals' to match 'plants'. Use 'the human body' (singular) or 'human bodies' but keep consistent. This corrects pronoun/reference and number agreement.

× For example, I I always watch documentaries on plants and animals.

✓ For example, I always watch documentaries on plants and animals.

Remove duplicated 'I I'. The rest of the sentence is fine.

× Well, I have done simple uh, school experiments and a small biology project and they were very interesting because I could see real result.

✓ Well, I did simple school experiments and a small biology project, and they were very interesting because I could see real results.

Use past tense 'did' to match finished actions. 'Real result' should be plural 'real results' or 'a real result'. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity. This fixes tense and article/number issues.

× For example, uh, last year I grew some plants in different lights, uh, to watch which plant grow faster.

✓ For example, last year I grew some plants under different lights to see which plant grew faster.

Use 'under different lights' rather than 'in different lights'. Use 'to see' instead of 'to watch' for observing results, and past tense 'grew' to match time reference. Also 'grow' should be past 'grew'.

× Umm, I measured their height every week.

✓ I measured their height every week.

Remove filler 'Umm'. The sentence correctly uses past tense 'measured' for a past habitual action; no tense change needed. This suggestion is stylistic to remove filler.

× I also like watching, uh, watching short signs.

✓ I also like watching short science clips.

The phrase repeats 'watching' and contains 'short signs' which is unclear—likely meant 'short science videos' or 'short science clips'. Replace filler 'uh' and correct the noun for clarity.

× Yes, I like to watch science pro, uh, science TV programs, uh, like uh, like uh, doc documentary on plants and animals.

✓ Yes, I like to watch science TV programs, such as documentaries on plants and animals.

Remove fillers and repetition. 'Doc documentary' is redundant; use 'documentaries'. 'Such as' or 'like' introduces examples correctly. Keep 'to watch' or use 'watch' consistently.

× I also like uh discovery programs about animals.

✓ I also like Discovery programs about animals.

Remove filler 'uh'. If referring to the Discovery Channel, capitalize 'Discovery' as a proper noun. This corrects reference clarity.

× Well, I think many people in China do visit Science Museum, especially students and families.

✓ Well, I think many people in China do visit science museums, especially students and families.

'Science Museum' should be plural 'science museums' or a definite form 'the Science Museum' if referring to a specific one. Use lowercase unless it's a proper name. Plural matches the general idea of many people visiting such institutions.

× Schools often organize trips for children to go with their class and parents take kids on weekends because the because the interactive and fun.

✓ Schools often organize trips for children to go with their class, and parents take their kids on weekends because they are interactive and fun.

Remove repeated 'because the because the'. Add 'their' before 'kids' for possession. Use 'they are' to refer back to museums (or 'science museums') and make the clause grammatical. Correct preposition and pronoun references.

× I sometimes go myself where there is a new exhibition.

✓ I sometimes go myself when there is a new exhibition.

Use 'when' rather than 'where' because the sentence refers to the time an exhibition appears, not a place. The present tense 'is' is acceptable for recurring events; keep tense but correct the conjunction for meaning.