Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce repetition and filler words, use correct grammar and clearer phrasing, and keep answer concise (max 4 sentences). Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words.

예시: Yes, I do. I find science fascinating because it explains how the world works, and I enjoy learning about physics in particular. For example, I often watch Brian Cox’s videos to understand concepts in quantum physics, and I have a basic knowledge of computation which helps me follow these topics.

제안: Correct verb forms and simplify structure. Give a clear time reference and one concise reason or example. Use linking words like 'after' or 'because' properly.

예시: I began studying science seriously after I finished high school. After graduation, I started learning the basics of computation and artificial intelligence because I wanted to build practical skills for a future career.

제안: Avoid awkward phrasing and be more specific. State your main interest first, then explain why using clear vocabulary and linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: I am most interested in space science because I want to understand the challenges of space travel and planetary exploration. I am also studying artificial intelligence recently because I hope to combine AI with space applications in my career.

제안: Answer directly with specific activities you have done, even small ones. Use correct tense and concise sentences. If you have not done something, say so and then mention related activities or plans.

예시: I haven’t done much in space science because I find it quite complex, but I have worked on small machine learning projects. For example, I built a simple classification model as part of an online course and plan to apply similar skills to space data in the future.

제안: Be careful with word choice and clarity. Say clearly whether you watch science programs, then explain how you follow science (TV, websites). Avoid incorrect or unclear phrases.

예시: I don’t watch many science TV programs because there are few high-quality shows in my country, but I follow scientific developments online. I often read articles and watch lectures on websites to keep up with AI and other fields.

제안: Make statements precise and avoid overgeneralization. Start with a clear opinion and support it with a simple example or contrast. Use correct country/region names and grammar.

예시: Yes, many Chinese people visit science museums, especially families and school groups. I have noticed that Chinese tourists also visit museums abroad, so some European and American museums can be quite crowded with Chinese visitors.

× Actually I do I I found it interesting and it makes us understood how the whole world works.

✓ Actually I do. I find it interesting and it helps us understand how the whole world works.

The student mixed past and present tenses incorrectly: 'found' (past) should be 'find' (present) to match 'do' and ongoing interest; 'makes us understood' is wrong because 'make' should be followed by base verb 'understand', not past tense. Use present simple for general truths and preferences. Suggestion: use 'find' and 'helps us understand'.

× Moreover, as I'm counter sensing, I already know the basics of computation.

✓ Moreover, as I'm interested in it, I already know the basics of computing.

'Counter sensing' is not correct English; likely intended 'interested in' or similar. Also 'basics of computation' is acceptable but 'basics of computing' is more natural. 'Interested in' is the correct prepositional phrase. Suggest using clear, common phrases like 'interested in' and 'basics of computing'.

× In addition, uh, I try to watch Brian Cox videos about quantum physics.

✓ In addition, I try to watch Brian Cox's videos about quantum physics.

This sentence is mostly correct but adding possessive 'Brian Cox's videos' is more natural. 'Try to watch' is acceptable for habitual action. No major tense change needed. Suggest using the possessive form to improve clarity.

× Besides the science lesson they taught us in school, I started literally started learn about science after graduating from high school.

✓ Besides the science lessons they taught us in school, I literally started learning about science after graduating from high school.

Errors: duplicate 'started' and incorrect verb form 'learn' after 'started' — use gerund 'learning'. Also 'lesson' should be plural 'lessons' if referring to multiple classes. Keep past simple 'started' to indicate when the action began. Suggest removing duplicate words and using 'learning'.

× That because I'm compensation I started to learn the basics of computation, artificial intelligence itself.

✓ That's because, as I was compensating, I started to learn the basics of computation, especially artificial intelligence.

Original is unclear: 'That because I'm compensation' is ungrammatical. Likely intended 'That's because I was compensating' or 'To compensate, I started...'. Use contraction 'That's' and clarify reason. 'Artificial intelligence itself' is awkward; 'especially artificial intelligence' is clearer. Suggest rephrasing to express intended meaning clearly.

× Besides, I learn about artificial intelligence recently and try to build my career on it.

✓ Also, I have been learning about artificial intelligence recently and am trying to build my career in it.

Tense mismatch: 'learn ... recently' should use present perfect continuous 'have been learning' to express recent ongoing action. 'Try to build my career on it' is a less natural preposition; use 'build my career in it'. Suggest present perfect continuous for recent activities and 'in' for field of career.

× I find the science about space more interesting because I try to understand world obstacles that prevent us from jetting other visiting other planets.

✓ I find space science more interesting because I try to understand the obstacles that prevent us from visiting other planets.

Several issues: 'the science about space' is awkward — use 'space science'. 'World obstacles' is vague; 'the obstacles' is better. 'Jetting other visiting other planets' contains errors: 'jetting' is unnecessary and 'visiting other planets' is correct. Remove redundancy and use clear nouns. Suggest simplifying phrase to 'obstacles that prevent us from visiting other planets'.

× Precisely how could also persist in and build a systems machine learning systems in it?

✓ How could I persist in and build machine learning systems in this field?

The original sentence has word order and redundancy problems: 'systems machine learning systems' repeats words; 'Precisely' is unnecessary. Reorder to standard question form 'How could I...' and use 'machine learning systems' once. Suggest simplifying and using proper question word order.

× I have never did anything about space science itself because I'm finding quite complex learning about.

✓ I have never done anything related to space science itself because I find it quite complex to learn about.

Incorrect past tense 'did' after 'have never' — use past participle 'done'. 'I'm finding quite complex learning about' is unnatural; use 'I find it quite complex to learn about'. Keep present perfect 'have never done' and present simple 'find' for general opinion. Suggest using correct auxiliary + past participle and proper infinitive phrasing.

× Through TV programs based on artificial intelligence in my country, because the Azerbaijan itself is underdeveloped on the sex sections.

✓ There are some TV programs about artificial intelligence in my country, but Azerbaijan itself is underdeveloped in those sections.

Sentence fragments and wrong prepositions: 'Through TV programs...' is not a complete clause. 'Underdeveloped on the sex sections' is incorrect and likely meant 'underdeveloped in those sections' or 'in that area'. Rephrase to a complete sentence and use 'in' for being underdeveloped in a field. Suggest restructuring to 'There are some TV programs... but Azerbaijan is underdeveloped in that area.'

× However, I try to follow recent changes developments through websites.

✓ However, I try to follow recent developments through websites.

Redundant words 'changes developments' — choose one, 'developments' fits. 'Try to follow' is acceptable. Use concise noun phrase 'recent developments'. Suggest removing redundant word and keep present simple for habitual action.

× From what I have heard, some museums are quite popular in China, especially among families and scholars.

✓ From what I have heard, some museums are quite popular in China, especially among families and scholars.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. Subject 'some museums' agrees with verb 'are'. Kept as is.

× However, I observed that most of the museums in Europe and countries and America itself are full of Chinese.

✓ However, I have observed that many museums in European countries and America are full of Chinese visitors.

Original word order and phrasing are awkward: 'Europe and countries and America itself' is incorrect. Use 'European countries and America' and specify 'Chinese visitors' to clarify meaning. Use present perfect 'have observed' for recent observation. Suggest clearer noun phrase and correct order.