News— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler (e.g., "uh", "so"), and add one specific detail using a linking word. Keep to 2–3 sentences. Improve vocabulary by replacing general words like "interested" with richer verbs or adjectives when appropriate.

예시: Yes. I follow the news regularly because it helps me understand current events and global trends. For example, I read articles on politics and economics every morning, which helps me form informed opinions.

제안: Correct grammar and improve coherence: use singular/plural correctly ("applications", "stories"), remove redundancy, and use linking words (e.g., "so", "therefore"). Mention one reliable source and one reason for trustworthiness to show awareness of credibility.

예시: I mainly get news from social media apps like Facebook and Instagram because they offer real-time updates and are convenient. However, I also check reputable sites such as BBC for important stories to ensure accuracy.

제안: Fix grammar and word choice: use correct verb forms and vocabulary ("seems", "involves", "deadlines", "career", "stress"). Provide a brief reason and contrast with your preferred job to make the answer clearer and more natural. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I would not like to be a journalist because the job seems stressful and involves tight deadlines. I prefer a career with a more predictable schedule and lower stress levels, such as working in administration.

제안: Improve fluency and grammar: remove extra words (e.g., "on my before breakfast"), use linking words like "and" or "so", and be specific about one example to enrich the response. Keep it concise and natural.

예시: Yes, I read a few headlines before breakfast about local traffic updates and an international summit. A quick news check helps me stay informed and often gives me topics to discuss with friends.

제안: Complete the example and correct grammar: use correct tense and relative clauses ("which helps us stay informed"). Provide one full, specific example and use linking words ("for instance", "for example") to finish the thought. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I often discuss the news with my friends. For instance, last week we talked about a new government policy in Thailand, which helped us understand how it might affect our daily lives.

× Yes, I am quite interested in news because it helps me stay informed about current events and global trends.

✓ Yes, I am quite interested in the news because it helps me stay informed about current events and global trends.

Missing definite article: 'news' as a general topic often takes 'the' when referring to news content in general. Use 'the news' to refer to news media or news items. Suggestion: say 'the news' when speaking about news in general.

× I follow both domestic and international news, especially uh, politics and economics.

✓ I follow both domestic and international news, especially politics and economics.

Unnecessary filler 'uh' should be omitted in written responses. No preposition error here but filler removal clarifies the sentence. Suggestion: avoid filler words when formalizing spoken responses.

× I usually get news from social media application like Facebook and Instagram because they provide real time updates and they are very convenient.

✓ I usually get news from social media applications like Facebook and Instagram because they provide real-time updates and are very convenient.

Plural/singular and hyphenation errors: 'application' should be plural 'applications' to match 'like Facebook and Instagram'. 'real time' as a compound adjective before 'updates' should be hyphenated to 'real-time'. Also remove redundant 'they' before 'are'. Suggestion: match number and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× I can quickly catch up on the headlines, discuss interesting story with my friends and easily sharing or articles.

✓ I can quickly catch up on the headlines, discuss interesting stories with my friends, and easily share articles.

Quantifier/number and verb form errors: 'story' should be plural 'stories' to agree with 'interesting' and general meaning. 'sharing or articles' is incorrect; correct verb form is 'share articles'. Also add Oxford commas and parallel verb forms. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and match singular/plural.

× No, I would not like to be a journalist because the job seem stressful and involve many responsibilities such as meeting tight deadline.

✓ No, I would not like to be a journalist because the job seems stressful and involves many responsibilities such as meeting tight deadlines.

Subject-verb agreement errors: 'job' is singular so verbs require third-person singular forms 'seems' and 'involves'. Also 'deadline' should be plural 'deadlines' in this context. Suggestion: use 's' for third-person singular verbs and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate.

× I would prefer less pressure carrier where I can have more a predictable schedule and lower straight levels.

✓ I would prefer a less stressful career where I can have a more predictable schedule and lower stress levels.

Wrong word choices and word order: 'carrier' should be 'career'. 'less pressure' should be 'less stressful' to modify career. 'more a predictable' incorrect order; correct is 'a more predictable schedule'. 'straight levels' is incorrect; intended 'stress levels'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives and correct word order.

× Yes, I read a few headlines this morning on my before breakfast merely about local traffic updates and some international events.

✓ Yes, I read a few headlines this morning before my breakfast, mainly about local traffic updates and some international events.

Article and word order errors: 'on my before breakfast' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'before my breakfast'. 'merely' is awkward; 'mainly' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: use correct prepositional phrase order and choose suitable adverb.

× I find a quick news check helpful because it keeps me informed and often sparks conversation during the day.

✓ I find a quick news check helpful because it keeps me informed and often sparks conversations during the day.

Count noun agreement: 'conversation' should be plural 'conversations' to indicate multiple instances across the day. Present participle use is fine. Suggestion: pluralize when referring to repeated occurrences.

× Yes, I often discuss the news with my friends. We talk about current events in Thailand and sometimes international headlines which held us stay informed and give a topic to chat about during the day.

✓ Yes, I often discuss the news with my friends. We talk about current events in Thailand and sometimes international headlines which help us stay informed and give us topics to chat about during the day.

Verb tense and pronoun errors: 'held' is incorrect past form; should be 'help' for present. 'us stay informed' needs verb 'help us stay' and add 'us' before 'topics'. Also 'give a topic' should be 'give us topics' for plural repeated conversations. Suggestion: use present tense for habitual actions and include appropriate pronouns and plural nouns.

× For example, last week we talked about.

✓ For example, last week we talked about the new government policy.

Fragment: sentence ends abruptly without an object. Provide a specific topic to complete the sentence. Suggestion: always include the object or clause after 'talked about' to form a complete sentence.