Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сначала ответьте прямо и грамматически правильно: «Yes, I had a bike». Используйте артикли в выражениях «a bike» и «a child». Если вы не помните точный возраст, достаточно кратко сказать «I think I was about five or six». Вместо неестественного «my father had got a bike for me» скажите «my father bought me one». Сократите паузы и не повторяйте неопределённость.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I think I was about five or six when my father bought it for me. I used to ride it around our neighborhood.

제안: Ответьте именно о популярности велосипедов в вашей стране сейчас, а не только о своём детстве. Скажите «Bikes are popular» или «Cycling is popular»; местоимение «it» здесь не подходит. Для примера используйте связку, например «For instance», и приведите конкретную причину или ситуацию. Избегайте неясных фраз вроде «in my age», «every my neighbor's child» и «straight it was»; лучше сказать «among people my age» и описать, где люди ездят на велосипедах.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and young adults. For instance, many people cycle to school or work because it is an affordable and convenient way to get around. You can also see families riding bicycles in parks at the weekend.

× Yes, I had bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Singular countable nouns such as bike and child need an article. Use a before each noun here.

× Yes, definitely. It's more popular in my country, especially I think in my age.

✓ Yes, definitely. It's more popular in my country, especially, I think, among people my age.

In is not the natural preposition in this age expression. Use among people my age to refer to people who are the same age as you.

× For example, when I was five years, umm, every my neighbor's child has had a bicycle for children and we ride around the home and straight it was.

✓ For example, when I was five years old, every child in my neighborhood had a bicycle, and we rode around near our homes.

When stating someone's age, use the adjective old after the number of years: five years old.

× For example, when I was five years, umm, every my neighbor's child has had a bicycle for children and we ride around the home and straight it was.

✓ For example, when I was five years old, every child in my neighborhood had a bicycle, and we rode around near our homes.

Every is followed directly by a singular noun; it cannot be followed by the possessive determiner my. Say every child in my neighborhood.

× For example, when I was five years, umm, every my neighbor's child has had a bicycle for children and we ride around the home and straight it was.

✓ For example, when I was five years old, every child in my neighborhood had a bicycle, and we rode around near our homes.

The speaker is describing a past childhood experience, so use the simple past had and rode. The present perfect has had and present-tense ride do not fit this past-time context.