Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
수험생
Yes, as I was growing up I was very fond of cycling and my parents bought me a small bicycle when I was around 7 or 8 years old.
시험관
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
수험생
Well, of course I would agree to this. Bikes are very popular in my country, not only as a leisure activity but also as umm, someone who would travel to their office using their bicycle. I would say that it is a very, very good exercise physically and mentally. Also, it is very useful if someone wants to pay attention to the.
평가
총점
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
점수: 83.0제안: Répondez directement, puis ajoutez un détail personnel concret. Votre réponse est claire et pertinente, mais « as I was growing up » et « when I was around 7 or 8 years old » expriment tous deux une idée temporelle ; vous pouvez alléger la phrase et préciser, par exemple, où vous aimiez faire du vélo.
예시: Yes, I did. I loved cycling as a child, and my parents bought me a small bike when I was about seven. I used to ride it around our neighborhood.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
점수: 45.0제안: Commencez par une réponse directe, puis expliquez brièvement les usages du vélo avec des exemples précis. Remplacez « I would agree to this » par une formulation naturelle comme « Yes, definitely ». Évitez les répétitions (« very, very »), construisez correctement l’idée des déplacements domicile-travail et terminez votre dernière phrase : « pay attention to the » est inachevé.
예시: Yes, definitely. Bikes are popular in my country, both for recreation and for commuting to work. They’re also a good way to stay active, and in busy cities they can be more convenient than driving.
문법
× Bikes are very popular in my country, not only as a leisure activity but also as umm, someone who would travel to their office using their bicycle.
✓ Bikes are very popular in my country, not only as a leisure activity but also as a means of travelling to work.
The original sentence does not use parallel structures: 'as a leisure activity' is followed by 'as someone who would travel,' which incorrectly describes a bike as a person. Use matching noun phrases, such as 'as a leisure activity' and 'as a means of travelling to work.'
× Also, it is very useful if someone wants to pay attention to the.
✓ Also, it is very useful for someone who wants to pay attention to their surroundings.
The sentence ends with 'the,' but the definite article must come before a noun, and no noun follows it. The sentence is incomplete as transcribed. Adding 'their surroundings' gives the clause a complete and natural ending; use the intended noun if the recording contains a different one.
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