Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, then add a few relevant details. Use the past tense consistently: say “it had” rather than “it has,” and “rode” rather than “wrote.” Avoid repeating “as a gift” and use “less often” instead of “lesser day by day.” If you mean the bike had training wheels, say so clearly.

예시: Yes, I had a pink bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my birthday, and it had training wheels. I rode it almost every day at first, but as I got busier, I used it less often.

제안: Make your meaning clear by distinguishing bicycles from motorbikes. Avoid repeating “we barely see any,” and explain why bicycles are less common with a specific, logical detail. Use “fewer parking spaces” rather than “lesser parking lots,” and connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Not really. Most people in my country travel by motorbike or car, especially in busy cities. Bicycles are less common because the roads can be crowded and there are few safe places to park them. However, you can still see people cycling in parks and quieter neighborhoods.

× The bike was it has four wheels and it's in a pink colour.

✓ The bike had four wheels and was pink.

The original combines incomplete and conflicting clauses, making the sentence structure unclear. State the bike's features in one complete clause: The bike had four wheels and was pink.

× The bike was it has four wheels and it's in a pink colour.

✓ The bike had four wheels and was pink.

The student is describing a bike from childhood, so the past tense is appropriate. Use had rather than has, and was rather than it's.

× I had it as a gift from my father, as a birthday gift and I wrote it every day and as I was getting busy, I wrote it lesser day by day.

✓ I received it as a birthday gift from my father, and I rode it every day. As I got busier, I rode it less often.

For the past action of using a bike, the correct verb is rode, the past tense of ride. Wrote is the past tense of write and does not express this meaning. Keep past-tense verbs consistent when describing events from childhood.

× I had it as a gift from my father, as a birthday gift and I wrote it every day and as I was getting busy, I wrote it lesser day by day.

✓ I received it as a birthday gift from my father, and I rode it every day. As I got busier, I rode it less often.

Lesser is not the right form to describe how frequently an action happens. Use the adverbial phrase less often. For example, say I rode it less often as I got busier.

× We barely see any we barely see any bikes in our country as it's more inconvenient as there are lesser parking lots for bikes.

✓ We barely see any bikes in our country because it's more inconvenient, as there are fewer parking lots for bikes.

Use fewer with countable plural nouns such as parking lots. Less is used with uncountable nouns, while lesser does not fit this comparison. Use fewer parking lots.