Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответьте прямо, затем добавьте одну конкретную деталь о том, где или как вы катались. Избегайте повторения “I had a bike” и “when I was a child”; вместо неестественного “then I was a child” используйте “when I was younger”. Свяжите идеи естественно и уложитесь в 2–3 предложения.

예시: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike with my friends around our neighborhood, especially at weekends. It was one of my favorite hobbies when I was younger.

제안: Сначала дайте ясный ответ о популярности велосипедов в России, а затем поясните его. Не обобщайте словом “everybody”: можно сказать “many people rely on cars”. Используйте правильную форму “people ride”, уберите повторы и незаконченные фразы, особенно “that looks really check”. Добавьте конкретную причину или сравнение с Амстердамом.

예시: Bikes are not as popular in Russia as cars, especially in larger cities where many people rely on driving. However, I admire Amsterdam because cycling is part of everyday life there, and the city has excellent bike lanes.

× I rode a lot, uh, with my friends then I was a child.

✓ I rode a lot with my friends when I was a child.

Use when to introduce the time during which you rode your bike. Then means 'at that time' and does not correctly connect these clauses in this sentence.

× That was my hobby then I was a child.

✓ That was my hobby when I was a child.

Use when to introduce the time clause. Then does not correctly connect the two clauses here.

× I'm from Russia and everybody uh ride a car there

✓ I'm from Russia, and everybody rides a car there.

Everybody is grammatically singular, so the verb in the present simple needs the third-person singular ending -s: rides.

× I would like to move to Amsterdam because I really like that that people riding bikes there then that looks really check

✓ I would like to move to Amsterdam because I really like that people ride bikes there, and that looks really check.

The clause people riding bikes there has no finite verb. Use people ride or people are riding to form a complete clause. The repeated that is removed, and and connects the final clause more appropriately than then. The word check is retained because changing it would require guessing what the speaker intended.