Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 어린 시절 자전거가 있었는지 바로 답한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 문장이 길게 이어지고 마지막의 “so”로 끝나 답변이 미완성처럼 들립니다. 문장을 두 개로 나누고, 강변 공원에서 무엇을 했는지 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. “when I was in elementary school”은 “when I was an elementary school student”보다 자연스럽습니다.

예시: Yes, I had a white bike when I was in elementary school. I often rode it with my older brother at a park near our house, which was beside the river.

제안: 질문에 직접 답하고 이유를 제시한 점은 좋지만, 답변이 “in”에서 끊겨 완성되지 않았습니다. “transportations” 대신 보통 “forms of transport” 또는 “means of transportation”이라고 합니다. 교통수단을 반복해서 나열하기보다 대표적인 예를 1~2개 들고, 자전거가 덜 인기 있는 이유를 간결하게 설명하세요.

예시: I don’t think bikes are especially popular in my country. Most people prefer public transport, such as buses and the subway, because it is convenient and widely available. Cars are also a popular choice for longer journeys.

× I had a white one when I was an elementary school student and I often went riding a bike with my older brother near my house because there was a park along the river so.

✓ I had a white one when I was an elementary school student, and I often went riding a bike with my older brother near my house because there was a park along the river.

Using because and so together to connect the same cause-and-effect relationship is redundant. Keep because to introduce the reason, and remove so.

× I don't think that bikes are popular in my country because other transportations such as subway or bus or air subway or bus or other things like cars are more convenient and widely used in

✓ I don't think that bikes are popular in my country because other forms of transportation, such as the subway, buses, or cars, are more convenient and widely used.

Transportation is generally an uncountable noun when it refers to transport in general, so it should not be made plural as transportations. Use transportation or forms of transportation instead.

× I don't think that bikes are popular in my country because other transportations such as subway or bus or air subway or bus or other things like cars are more convenient and widely used in

✓ I don't think that bikes are popular in my country because other forms of transportation, such as the subway, buses, or cars, are more convenient and widely used.

The answer ends with in, which leaves the sentence unfinished because in needs to be followed by a location or another complement. Remove the trailing in or complete the phrase, for example, with in my country.