Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 先直接回答问题，再补充一两个具体细节。注意表达“小时候”应使用“when I was a child”，而不是“when I wore with a child”；描述过去的自行车时，统一使用过去时。另外，“a black bike my mother bought it for me”中重复使用了宾语，可改为“a black bike that my mother bought for me”。

예시: Yes, I did. I had a black bike that my mother bought for me when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood.

제안: 问题询问现在自行车是否流行，因此要先明确说明现在的情况，再用过去作对比。减少“um”等填充词；描述过去用过去时（例如“couldn't afford”），并将“transportations”改为更自然的“other forms of transport”。结尾可表达“现在不如以前流行”，例如“not as popular as it used to be”。

예시: Bikes used to be very popular in my country, especially when I was a child. Many people rode them because they couldn't afford a car. These days, bikes are not as popular as they used to be, although people still use them for exercise and short trips.

× Yeah, of course I bought a bike when I wore with a child.

✓ Yeah, of course I bought a bike when I was a child.

这里描述的是童年时发生的事情，应使用一般过去时。wore 是 wear 的过去式，意思是“穿着”，此处应使用 be 动词的过去式 was。

× Yeah, of course I bought a bike when I wore with a child.

✓ Yeah, of course I bought a bike when I was a child.

表达“当我还是个孩子时”应说 when I was a child，不需要介词 with。建议记住固定表达 be a child，而不是 be with a child。

× It is a black bike my mother bought it for me.

✓ It is a black bike that my mother bought for me.

my mother bought for me 是修饰 bike 的定语从句。bike 已经是 bought 的宾语，因此不能再用 it 重复指代。可以加 that 引出定语从句，并删除 it。

× Um, yeah, when I was a child, it's a very, um, popular, um, bicycle in my country because at that time many people can't afford a car or other transportations, but today it is not popularized before.

✓ Um, yeah, when I was a child, bicycles were very popular in my country because at that time many people couldn't afford a car or other forms of transportation, but today they are not as popular as before.

句子描述的是“我小时候”的情况，应该用过去时。原句中的 it's（it is）与过去的时间背景不一致；可改为 bicycles were。

× Um, yeah, when I was a child, it's a very, um, popular, um, bicycle in my country because at that time many people can't afford a car or other transportations, but today it is not popularized before.

✓ Um, yeah, when I was a child, bicycles were very popular in my country because at that time many people couldn't afford a car or other forms of transportation, but today they are not as popular as before.

这里谈论的是一类交通工具（自行车），应使用复数 bicycles，而不是单数 bicycle。另一个问题是 transportation 通常作为不可数名词使用，不加 -s；可以说 other forms of transportation。

× Um, yeah, when I was a child, it's a very, um, popular, um, bicycle in my country because at that time many people can't afford a car or other transportations, but today it is not popularized before.

✓ Um, yeah, when I was a child, bicycles were very popular in my country because at that time many people couldn't afford a car or other forms of transportation, but today they are not as popular as before.

at that time 指过去的时间，因此“买不起”应使用过去式 couldn't afford，而不是现在时 can't afford。描述过去情况时，要确保句中相关动词的时态保持一致。

× Um, yeah, when I was a child, it's a very, um, popular, um, bicycle in my country because at that time many people can't afford a car or other transportations, but today it is not popularized before.

✓ Um, yeah, when I was a child, bicycles were very popular in my country because at that time many people couldn't afford a car or other forms of transportation, but today they are not as popular as before.

transportation 在表示“交通运输”时通常是不可数名词，不能使用复数形式 transportations。可以直接说 transportation，或说 other forms of transportation。

× Um, yeah, when I was a child, it's a very, um, popular, um, bicycle in my country because at that time many people can't afford a car or other transportations, but today it is not popularized before.

✓ Um, yeah, when I was a child, bicycles were very popular in my country because at that time many people couldn't afford a car or other forms of transportation, but today they are not as popular as before.

原句用 not popularized before 来表达“现在不如以前流行”，比较结构不正确。应使用 not as + 形容词 + as，例如 not as popular as before，表示“没有以前那么流行”。