Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly by saying that you owned a bike, rather than saying you “had a bike ride.” Remove fillers such as “uh” and the unnecessary opening “great question.” Your details about your father and friends are relevant, but make the final thought complete and explain briefly how your friends helped you learn.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me and tried to teach me, but he was so protective that he wouldn’t let me practise on my own. In the end, my friends helped me learn by riding with me around our neighbourhood.

제안: Give a clear answer first, then support it with the road-safety reason. Avoid repeating “roads,” “streets,” and “I don’t think,” and use the natural phrase “ride a bike” instead of “go to bike.” You could also make your point more specific by mentioning traffic or a lack of bike lanes.

예시: No, I wouldn’t say bikes are very popular where I live. Many streets are busy, and there aren’t enough separate bike lanes, so cycling can feel unsafe. As a result, most people prefer to travel by car or public transport.

× But then my friends managed to teach me how to, uh, ride a bike, uh, practically and.

✓ But then my friends managed to teach me how to ride a bike.

The sentence ends with and, which normally connects this idea to another clause. Since no second clause follows, the sentence is incomplete. Remove the final and to make it a complete sentence.

× So I don't think people uh would go uh and would go to um bike every day in their lives.

✓ So I don't think people would go biking every day.

When go describes taking part in a recreational activity, it is commonly followed by a verb ending in -ing, as in go biking. The repeated would go is also unnecessary, so use the phrase once.