Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly using the past tense: “Yes, I did.” Correct tense and grammar errors such as “I got,” “one of my birthday presents,” and “they started teaching me.” Avoid repeating the idea that your parents wanted you to be brave; instead, explain briefly how learning to ride helped you. Keep the response to a few clear sentences.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a bike for my birthday because I was quite timid and they wanted me to try new things. They taught me how to ride it, and I gradually became more confident.

제안: Give a clear opinion about whether bikes are popular instead of focusing mainly on your own lack of interest in sports. Use your observation of rental bikes as supporting evidence. Replace unclear phrases such as “biker popular” and reduce fillers like “like” and repeated “really.” You could distinguish between cycling for exercise and using bikes for transport.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities. I often see rental bikes on the streets, and many people use them to get to work or travel short distances. They seem to be more popular as a convenient way to get around than as a form of exercise.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about the past, and the phrase when I was a child also sets a past-time context. Use the past-tense verb had instead of the present-tense form do have.

× The reason why I get a bike it is because the bike is one of my birthday present from my parents.

✓ The reason I got a bike was that it was one of my birthday presents from my parents.

The speaker is describing a childhood event, so get and is should be changed to the past-tense forms got and was. Keep the verbs in the same past-time frame.

× The reason why I get a bike it is because the bike is one of my birthday present from my parents.

✓ The reason I got a bike was that it was one of my birthday presents from my parents.

The original sentence combines two structures: The reason why... and it is because.... This creates a redundant and awkward construction. Use The reason... was that... to express the cause clearly.

× The reason why I get a bike it is because the bike is one of my birthday present from my parents.

✓ The reason I got a bike was that it was one of my birthday presents from my parents.

After one of my, the noun must be plural because the item is being selected from a group. Change present to presents.

× They really want me to like be brave.

✓ They really wanted me to be brave.

This sentence describes what the parents wanted during the speaker's childhood, so want should be in the past tense: wanted. The word like is unnecessary here and can be omitted.

× Especially when I was young a very timid and I don't dare to try anything new.

✓ When I was young, I was very timid and didn't dare to try anything new.

The original sentence is missing a complete clause after when I was young. Use I was very timid to form a complete main clause. Starting with When also connects the time phrase clearly to the main idea.

× Especially when I was young a very timid and I don't dare to try anything new.

✓ When I was young, I was very timid and didn't dare to try anything new.

The sentence describes the speaker's childhood, so the past tense is needed throughout. Change don't dare to didn't dare.

× They want me to be brave, so they bought me a bike and they start to like teach me how to do.

✓ They wanted me to be brave, so they bought me a bike and started teaching me how to ride it.

The sentence describes past events, as shown by bought. Use the past-tense forms wanted and started to keep the verbs consistent with that time frame.

× They want me to be brave, so they bought me a bike and they start to like teach me how to do.

✓ They wanted me to be brave, so they bought me a bike and started teaching me how to ride it.

The phrase how to do is incomplete because do needs an object in this context. Since the bike is the topic, say how to ride it. The word like is unnecessary and can be removed.

× As I've mentioned it, I don't dare to try anything new and I don't like doing any sports.

✓ As I've mentioned, I don't dare to try anything new and I don't like doing any sports.

The pronoun it is unnecessary after mentioned because the speaker is referring to something already stated, not to a specific object. Say As I've mentioned.

× So I'm not really really sure of biker popular.

✓ So I'm not really sure whether bikes are popular.

The phrase sure of biker popular is not a complete or grammatical construction. Use whether followed by a subject and verb to express uncertainty about a full idea: whether bikes are popular.

× But I do see a lot of like rental bike on the streets.

✓ But I do see a lot of rental bikes on the streets.

Rental bikes are countable, and a lot of indicates more than one in this context. Use the plural form bikes.