Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你直接回答了问题，也提到了自行车的来源和当时的感受，但有几处表达不自然或不清楚。可以说“when I was about eight years old”，而不是“about my eight years old”；“a reward for winning the race”比“a gift to my champion”更准确。最后一句中的“my first back”意思不明，可以删掉，或改成“my first bike”。建议按“直接回答—补充原因—描述感受”的顺序组织，避免填充词。

예시: Yes, I did. My mum bought me my first bike when I was about eight, as a reward for winning a running race. I was thrilled because I had wanted a bike for a long time.

제안: 你有明确表达“是”，但后面的句子存在重复和语法错误，部分意思也不清楚。“a best way to sport”可改为“a good way to exercise”或“a convenient way to get around”；“take me to anywhere”应改为“take me anywhere”。如果想表达在学校附近经常看到有人骑车，可以说“ I see people riding bikes around my school every day”。删去重复的“bicycle”和与问题无关的“I was happy”，并补充一个具体原因。

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They’re an affordable and convenient way to get around, especially for short trips. I often see students riding them near my school, and some people also use bikes for exercise.

× Yes, my mom bought me a bicycle, uh, about my eight years old, because I won a running race, so it was a gift to my champion.

✓ Yes, my mom bought me a bicycle when I was about eight years old because I won a running race, so it was a gift to my champion.

“about my eight years old”缺少完整的年龄表达结构。应说“when I was about eight years old”（当我大约八岁时），而不是用“my”直接修饰年龄。

× Yes, my mom bought me a bicycle, uh, about my eight years old, because I won a running race, so it was a gift to my champion.

✓ Yes, my mom bought me a bicycle when I was about eight years old because I won a running race; it was a gift to my champion.

“because”和“so”通常不在同一个因果结构中同时使用。这里保留“because”说明原因，并用分号连接结果句。

× I'm excited to get my first back.

✓ I was excited to get my first bike.

这段内容讲的是童年时收到第一辆自行车的经历，因此应使用过去时“was excited”。“back”在这里看起来是“bike”的口误或转写错误；如果想表达“第一辆自行车”，应说“my first bike”。

× Yes, bicyc bicycle is definitely a best way to sport.

✓ Yes, a bicycle is definitely the best way to exercise.

“best”是最高级，前面通常要用定冠词“the”，不能用“a”。因此应说“the best way”。

× A bicycle can take me to anywhere I want.

✓ A bicycle can take me anywhere I want.

“anywhere”表示“任何地方”，在这里可直接作地点副词使用，不需要在它前面加介词“to”。

× around my school and I read bicycle everywhere, every day.

✓ I ride a bicycle around my school every day.

单数可数名词“bicycle”前通常需要冠词，所以应说“a bicycle”。此外，“around my school”单独放在句首会形成不完整结构；可以将它放在完整句中。这里的“read”按语境应是想表达“ride”（骑）。