Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Trả lời trực tiếp và tự nhiên hơn bằng “Yes, I did.” Sau đó, kể ngắn gọn ai mua xe, màu sắc và cảm xúc của bạn. Dùng quá khứ “was” để miêu tả chiếc xe và diễn đạt rõ ý “đó là chiếc xe đầu tiên mẹ mua cho tôi”. Tránh các cụm không tự nhiên như “Just of course” và “what a first buy for me”.

예시: Yes, I did. My mom bought me a red bicycle when I was a child, and I loved it because it was my first bike.

제안: Nêu ý kiến ngay từ đầu, chẳng hạn “Yes, I think bikes are quite popular.” Dùng danh từ số nhiều “bikes” khi nói chung và sửa cụm “choose to buy ride by” thành “ride them”. Tránh lặp “because”; hãy dùng từ nối như “as a result” và nêu rõ lợi ích cụ thể, chẳng hạn giảm ô nhiễm hoặc tiết kiệm chi phí.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride them to school or work because they are affordable and environmentally friendly. As a result, cycling is a practical way to reduce air pollution.

× This color is red.

✓ Its color was red.

The student is describing a bicycle from childhood, so the past tense was is more appropriate than the present tense is.

× I really love it because it it's what a first buy uh for me

✓ I really loved it because it was the first bike my mom had bought for me.

The phrase it it's what a first buy does not form a grammatical clause. Use a clear subject and verb, such as it was, and express the intended idea as the first bike my mom had bought for me.

× Just because I think bicycle is really popular in my country, uh, because people choose to buy ride by to get to school and go to work because it is really eco-friendly

✓ I think bicycles are really popular in my country because people choose to ride bikes to get to school and go to work, as they are really eco-friendly.

When referring to bicycles in general, use the plural noun bicycles. The verb must also agree with that plural subject, so use are rather than is. Use bikes and they as plural forms later in the sentence to keep the reference consistent.

× Just because I think bicycle is really popular in my country, uh, because people choose to buy ride by to get to school and go to work because it is really eco-friendly

✓ I think bicycles are really popular in my country because people choose to ride bikes to get to school and go to work, as they are really eco-friendly.

The sequence buy ride by does not form a grammatical verb phrase. Use one clear verb construction, such as choose to ride bikes. Also, avoid starting with Just because when it leaves the opening clause incomplete; begin with I think instead.