Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
수험생
Yes I did. I had a bike when I was about 10 years old. Umm, by that, by that. By that time I didn't know how to ride a bike yet, but eventually I learned how to bike umm, with my parents.
시험관
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
수험생
Personal personally I don't think bikes are popular in my country that much. Well you see many cyclists biking around the place, but however we use cars a lot and there's barely any road, any sidewalks for the bikes to go on.
평가
총점
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
점수: 68.0제안: ตอบตรงคำถามได้ดีและให้รายละเอียดเกี่ยวกับอายุและการเรียนขี่จักรยาน แต่มีการพูดซ้ำและใช้คำเติม เช่น “by that, by that” และ “umm” ทำให้คำตอบไม่ลื่นไหล ควรใช้สำนวน “ride a bike” ให้สม่ำเสมอ และเพิ่มรายละเอียดสั้น ๆ ว่าพ่อแม่ช่วยสอนอย่างไร
예시: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about ten, but I didn’t know how to ride it at first. My parents taught me, and I eventually learned.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
점수: 62.0제안: แสดงความเห็นได้ชัด แต่มีการเริ่มประโยคซ้ำ (“Personal personally”) และใช้ “but” กับ “however” ซ้ำหน้าที่กัน ควรจัดคำตอบให้สอดคล้องกันโดยอธิบายว่ามีคนปั่นจักรยานให้เห็น แต่จักรยานยังไม่เป็นที่นิยมมากเมื่อเทียบกับรถยนต์ จากนั้นระบุอุปสรรคให้ชัด เช่น ขาดเลนจักรยานหรือถนนที่ปลอดภัย และใช้คำว่า “cycle lanes” แทน “sidewalks for the bikes”
예시: I wouldn’t say bikes are very popular in my country. Although you can see some people cycling, most people rely on cars because there aren’t many safe cycle lanes or suitable roads.
문법
× I don't think bikes are popular in my country that much.
✓ I don't think bikes are that popular in my country.
That much is awkwardly placed in this sentence. Put that before the adjective popular to express the degree of popularity more naturally.
× Well you see many cyclists biking around the place, but however we use cars a lot and there's barely any road, any sidewalks for the bikes to go on.
✓ Well, you see many cyclists biking around the place, but we use cars a lot, and there are barely any roads or sidewalks for bikes to ride on.
But and however both signal contrast, so using them together is redundant. Use either but or however, not both.
× there's barely any road, any sidewalks for the bikes to go on
✓ there are barely any roads or sidewalks for bikes to ride on
The phrase refers to plural roads and sidewalks, so use there are rather than there's (there is).
× there's barely any road, any sidewalks for the bikes to go on
✓ there are barely any roads or sidewalks for bikes to ride on
Roads and sidewalks are countable plural nouns in this context. Use roads to match the plural sidewalks, and connect the alternatives with or.
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