Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
수험생
Yes, I did. Um, my dad purchased one for me when I was a child as a gift and I enjoyed um cycling all the time. Especially when we would cycle with my parents all together
시험관
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
수험생
I wouldn't be sure about the whole country because, uh, my country is quite big, but um, I don't think they're quite popular, uh, in my city because, uh, we don't have much of a flat um areas uh so it's um very hard to bike around um the only place
평가
총점
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
점수: 72.0제안: Answer directly, then add one clear supporting detail. Replace the awkward phrase “as a gift” with “as a birthday present,” reduce fillers such as “um,” and connect the final fragment to the previous sentence. Use “my parents and I” rather than “my parents all together.”
예시: Yes, I did. My dad bought me a bike as a birthday present, and I loved riding it. I especially enjoyed cycling with my parents on weekends.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
점수: 55.0제안: Give a clear answer about your country or city first, then explain why. Avoid repeatedly hedging with “I wouldn’t be sure” and fillers, and correct “much of a flat areas” to “many flat areas.” Finish the incomplete thought after “the only place” with a specific example, such as a park or cycling path.
예시: Bikes are fairly popular in some parts of my country, although it varies by region. In my city, they’re less common because the roads are quite hilly and there aren’t many dedicated cycle lanes. People mostly ride them in parks or on riverside paths.
문법
× I enjoyed um cycling all the time. Especially when we would cycle with my parents all together.
✓ I enjoyed cycling all the time, especially when we would cycle with my parents.
Especially when we would cycle with my parents is a dependent clause, so it cannot stand alone as a complete sentence. Join it to the preceding sentence. The word um and the phrase all together are omitted for clarity; together expresses the intended meaning.
× I don't think they're quite popular in my city because we don't have much of a flat areas.
✓ I don't think they're quite popular in my city because we don't have many flat areas.
Areas is a plural countable noun, so use many rather than much. Also, do not use a before the plural noun areas.
× ...so it's very hard to bike around um the only place
✓ ...so it's very hard to bike around.
The only place is an incomplete noun phrase and does not form a complete sentence. Since the transcript does not provide the rest of the thought, omit this unfinished phrase rather than guessing how the student intended to continue.
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