Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, “Yes”를 반복해 답변이 다소 장황합니다. “although”와 “but”를 함께 쓰지 말고 하나만 사용하세요. 자전거를 몇 대 가졌는지, 도난당한 뒤 어떻게 했는지처럼 구체적인 세부 정보를 한 가지 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽고 풍부한 답변이 됩니다.

예시: Yes, I had a couple of bikes as a child. Unfortunately, one of them was stolen, so my parents eventually bought me another one.

제안: 질문에 답하려는 점은 보이지만, “unlike at UH”가 불완전해 비교 대상이 무엇인지 분명하지 않습니다. “but”를 반복하지 말고, 자전거가 인기 있는 이유나 유럽과의 차이를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어 자전거 도로, 출퇴근 이용, 여가 활동 등을 언급하면 답변이 더 논리적이고 자연스러워집니다.

예시: Yes, cycling is quite popular in my country, especially as a weekend activity. However, it isn’t as common for daily commuting as it is in many European countries, partly because our cycling infrastructure is less developed.

× Yes, although some bikes uh which I bought were stolen, but yes, I had some bikes.

✓ Yes. Although some bikes I bought were stolen, I had some bikes.

Although already introduces a contrast, so using but in the same clause is redundant. Use although without but, or use but without although.

× Yes, biking UH has been popular, but unlike at UH, but it's not the same level as Europe.

✓ Yes, biking has been popular, but it is not as popular in my country as it is in Europe.

The sentence uses but twice, and unlike is left without a complete comparison. Use one conjunction to connect the contrasting ideas, and state the comparison clearly.

× Yes, biking UH has been popular, but unlike at UH, but it's not the same level as Europe.

✓ Yes, biking has been popular, but it is not as popular in my country as it is in Europe.

The phrase not the same level as Europe compares biking's popularity with Europe itself, rather than with biking's popularity in Europe. Compare like with like by saying not as popular in my country as it is in Europe.