Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer the question directly and avoid contradicting yourself: clarify whether you had a bicycle as a child or bought your first one later. The sentence contains several hesitations and grammar errors, such as “I bought it when I was at 17th”; say “I bought one when I was 17.” Use a linking phrase such as “In fact” to add one clear supporting detail.

예시: I didn’t have a bike of my own when I was a child, although I sometimes rode other people’s bicycles. I loved cycling, so I always hoped to buy one. I finally got my first bike when I was 17.

제안: Give a direct answer, then explain the practical reasons bikes are popular. Avoid unsupported statistics and replace unclear wording such as “are not comes under the rich and an affiliate class” with a clear phrase like “many people cannot afford a car.” Correct the grammar in “2 Wheeler gives a support” and “a narrow roads”; use “two-wheelers are useful” and “narrow roads.” Reduce fillers and connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, two-wheelers are very popular in India. Many people choose them because they are more affordable than cars and easier to use on narrow, crowded roads. They also make it convenient to travel short distances.

× I had no bike when I was a child though I had a bicycle which I was lo I was. I love to ride and since my childhood my dream was to buy a bike which I bought it when I was at 17th.

✓ I had no bike when I was a child, though I had a bicycle which I was lo I was. I love to ride and since my childhood my dream was to buy a bike which I bought when I was at 17th.

The relative pronoun which already serves as the object of bought, so it should not be followed by the extra pronoun it. Remove it after bought.

× I had no bike when I was a child though I had a bicycle which I was lo I was. I love to ride and since my childhood my dream was to buy a bike which I bought it when I was at 17th.

✓ I had no bike when I was a child, though I had a bicycle which I was lo I was. I love to ride and since my childhood my dream was to buy a bike which I bought it when I was 17.

Use was 17 to state someone's age; do not use at or an ordinal ending such as -th with an age. Say I was 17.

× Uh, yes, that is uh, popular because in my country, uh, 90% people are not comes under the rich and an affiliate class.

✓ Uh, yes, that is uh, popular because in my country, uh, 90% of people are not comes under the rich and an affiliate class.

When a percentage is followed by a plural noun, use of between the percentage and the noun: 90% of people. Remember this pattern for percentages, fractions, and similar quantities.

× Uh, yes, that is uh, popular because in my country, uh, 90% people are not comes under the rich and an affiliate class.

✓ Uh, yes, that is uh, popular because in my country, uh, 90% people do not come under the rich and an affiliate class.

The present-tense negative form for the plural subject people is do not come. Do not combine are with the present-tense verb comes; use do not plus the base form come.

× So 2 Wheeler gives a support to reach to any destination due to a narrow roads of India.

✓ So two-wheelers give a support to reach to any destination due to a narrow roads of India.

The sentence refers to two-wheelers in general, so use the plural noun two-wheelers. A plural subject takes give, not gives. Use this plural form when making a general statement about a category.

× So 2 Wheeler gives a support to reach to any destination due to a narrow roads of India.

✓ So 2 Wheeler gives support to reach to any destination due to a narrow roads of India.

Support is uncountable in this meaning, so it does not take the article a. Say give support or provide support.

× So 2 Wheeler gives a support to reach to any destination due to a narrow roads of India.

✓ So 2 Wheeler gives a support to reach any destination due to a narrow roads of India.

Reach is normally used directly with its destination, without to. Say reach any destination, not reach to any destination.

× So 2 Wheeler gives a support to reach to any destination due to a narrow roads of India.

✓ So 2 Wheeler gives a support to reach to any destination due to narrow roads of India.

Do not use a before the plural noun roads. Use narrow roads without an article, or use a narrow road if you mean one road.