Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: You answer the question directly and add a relevant detail about when and where you rode the bike. Replace the vague phrase “a good bike” with a specific description, and say “My grandfather gave it to me” for more natural wording. You could also explain briefly why the bike was memorable.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandfather gave it to me for my birthday, and I often rode it around my neighborhood after school. It was a little old, but I loved it because it was my first bike.

제안: Give a complete, direct answer and connect your observation to it with a linking phrase such as “For example.” Use “bicycles are popular” or “cycling is popular” rather than “it’s so popular,” and avoid the filler “Umm.” Your final sentence is unfinished, so complete the reason—for example, mention convenience, cost, or the availability of cycling routes. Check the park name and phrasing as well.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in Japan. For example, I often see people riding them around Yoyogi Park, especially at weekends. I think many people cycle because it is a convenient way to get around and enjoy the outdoors.

× Umm it's so popular in Japan I often see many people riding bikes, especially on weekends around Yoyogi Hara parks.

✓ Umm, cycling is very popular in Japan, and I often see many people riding bikes, especially on weekends around Yoyogi Hara parks.

The original sentence joins two complete ideas without suitable punctuation or a conjunction. Use a comma and and to connect them clearly. Naming cycling as the subject also makes the meaning of it clear.

× It might be because cycling is the.

✓ It might be because cycling is popular.

The original sentence is incomplete: the is a determiner and needs a noun after it, and the thought is left unfinished. Use an adjective such as popular to complete the clause. If you intended to name a specific reason, finish the sentence with that idea instead.