Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 先直接回答“小时候有没有自行车”，再补充父母买车、颜色或骑车经历。注意时态和表达：用“my parents bought it for me”，不要说“it was bought from my parents”；“ride it to the park”表示骑车去公园，“rent”表示租用；描述过去的经历时，动词要用过去式。避免重复词，并把句子控制在五句以内。

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a blue bike when I was a child, and I loved it. I often rode it to the park at weekends, which was a fun way to get some exercise.

제안: 回答方向明确，但最后一句没有表达完整，建议补全“骑车是另一种什么方式”。说明城市交通拥堵与骑车受欢迎之间的关系即可，避免重复使用“because”和“so”。表达上可说“in cities”而不是“at the cities”，“traffic is really heavy”或“traffic gets really congested”，以及“during rush hour”。

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular, especially in big cities like Beijing and Shanghai. Traffic gets really congested during rush hour, so cycling is a convenient alternative to driving. It can also help people avoid getting stuck in traffic.

× Yes, it's a blue one it it was bought from my parents.

✓ Yes, it's a blue one. It was bought by my parents.

表示被动句中动作的执行者时，通常用 by，而不是 from。这里应说 “bought by my parents”。另外，原句中两个独立分句之间缺少标点，且重复了 it；建议用句号分开，并删去重复部分。

× I usually rent it to the park at weekends and it's really help me to do some exercise.

✓ I usually rent it to the park at weekends, and it really helps me to do some exercise.

主语 it 是第三人称单数，一般现在时的谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式 helps。原句中的 “it's really help” 不能这样构成谓语；应删去 is 的缩写形式，改为 “it really helps”。

× Sure, especially in big cities like Beijing or Shanghai, because there are a lot of cars at the cities, so the traffic's really jam at at a working time.

✓ Sure, especially in big cities like Beijing or Shanghai, because there are a lot of cars in the cities, so the traffic is really jammed during working hours.

表示“在城市里”应使用 in，而不是 at；表示“在工作时间”应使用 during。原句还重复使用了 at。建议记住常见搭配：in a city、during working hours。

× Sure, especially in big cities like Beijing or Shanghai, because there are a lot of cars at the cities, so the traffic's really jam at at a working time.

✓ Sure, especially in big cities like Beijing or Shanghai, because there are a lot of cars in the cities, so the traffic is really jammed during working hours.

jam 在这里描述交通“拥堵”的状态，应使用过去分词 jammed，构成 “is jammed”。不能在 be 动词 is 后直接使用原形 jam。

× Sure, especially in big cities like Beijing or Shanghai, because there are a lot of cars at the cities, so the traffic's really jam at at a working time.

✓ Sure, especially in big cities like Beijing or Shanghai, there are a lot of cars in the cities, so the traffic is really jammed during working hours.

because 和 so 通常不能在同一个因果结构中重复使用。可以保留 so 并删去 because，也可以保留 because 并删去 so。这里改为保留 so，使因果关系清楚。

× So having a bike and riding it, it's another.

✓ So having a bike and riding it is another option.

原句的主语 “having a bike and riding it” 后又出现了多余的 it，而且 “another” 后缺少名词，句意不完整。可以把动名词短语直接作为主语，并补上 option，表达“这是另一个选择”。