Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, then give the age and reason. Use the past tense consistently: say “I got one” rather than “I've got it,” and “at that time” rather than “that time.” Avoid restarting words; practise the sentence aloud so it sounds fluent. You can also say “when I was in Grade 2” without “the” before “primary school.”

예시: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a bike when I was in Grade 2 because they wanted me to learn how to ride. I remember being excited to practise in our neighborhood.

제안: State clearly that bikes are popular, then explain that bike-sharing services have made them convenient. Correct the unclear phrases: use “bike-sharing is common” instead of “become a trade,” “unlock a bike” instead of “unlock the bags,” and “finish your ride” instead of “complete the right.” Use linking words such as “because” and “once,” and describe where people can find or leave the bikes. Keep the response to no more than five sentences.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in cities. Bike-sharing services are common because people can unlock a bike by scanning a QR code with their smartphones. Once they finish their ride, they can park it in a designated area and pay through the app. This makes cycling a convenient way to get around.

× Yeah, as of course I've got it back when I was in, uh, grade 2 in the primary school, because my parents wanted me to learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Yeah, of course, I got it when I was in Grade 2 at primary school because my parents wanted me to learn how to ride a bike.

The student is describing a past event from childhood, so use the simple past got rather than the present perfect have got. Use the simple past for a completed event at a specific time in the past.

× Yeah, as of course I've got it back when I was in, uh, grade 2 in the primary school, because my parents wanted me to learn how to ride a bike.

✓ Yeah, of course, I got it when I was in Grade 2 at primary school because my parents wanted me to learn how to ride a bike.

When referring generally to the stage of education, say at primary school or in primary school, without the. Use the only when referring to a particular, previously identified school.

× So they bicy, they bought a bike for me that time.

✓ So they bought a bike for me at that time.

Use at before that time when referring to a particular point or period in the past. The phrase that time needs the preposition at in this sentence.

× Yes, of course, it's really popular in my country even it has already become a trade around us in our daily life.

✓ Yes, of course, bikes are really popular in my country, and bike-sharing has become part of our daily lives.

The subject bikes is plural, so it must be paired with the plural verb are, not the singular contraction it's. Make sure the verb agrees in number with its subject.

× Yes, of course, it's really popular in my country even it has already become a trade around us in our daily life.

✓ Yes, of course, bikes are really popular in my country, and bike-sharing has become part of our daily lives.

Even cannot directly connect these clauses in this sentence. Use even though when expressing contrast, or choose a conjunction such as and when adding related information. Here, and makes the relationship between the ideas clear.

× The people can just use their smartphones and scan the QR code can unlock the bags and when they complete the right just lock the bag and pay it.

✓ People can use their smartphones to scan the QR code and unlock a bike. When they finish their ride, they can lock the bike and pay for it.

The original sentence combines several actions without a clear grammatical structure. Use to scan to show the purpose of using a smartphone, and make the actions in the second sentence a complete clause with a subject and a verb.

× The people can just use their smartphones and scan the QR code can unlock the bags and when they complete the right just lock the bag and pay it.

✓ People can use their smartphones to scan the QR code and unlock a bike. When they finish their ride, they can lock the bike and pay for it.

In this context, the verb pay needs the preposition for before the thing being paid for. Say pay for it, not pay it.