Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly with “Yes, I did.” The description of the bike’s origin is unclear; say that your grandparents gave it to you for your sixth birthday. Use past tense consistently (“taught,” “was”), and say “an exciting experience” and “one of the most wonderful experiences.” Avoid unclear phrases such as “for of to nowadays” and reduce fillers. Add one specific detail about learning to ride or using the bike.

예시: Yes, I did. My grandparents gave me a bike for my sixth birthday, and I was thrilled. My aunt taught me how to ride it, and I remember feeling proud when I could finally ride on my own. I used it almost every day.

제안: Give a clear answer, then support it with a specific observation or reason. Avoid repeating “all every time, always every day”; use a concise phrase such as “I often see people cycling.” Say “enjoy riding” rather than “enjoy to pass their time with riding.” You could also mention where people cycle or why bikes are convenient.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. I often see people cycling in parks and on city streets, especially at weekends. They’re a convenient way to get around, and many young people also ride them for exercise or fun.

× He also had a bike when I was a child that was skipped from my grandparents to my 6th birthday and that was really exciting experience.

✓ I also had a bike when I was a child. It was given to me by my grandparents for my sixth birthday, and it was a really exciting experience.

Use I, not he, because the student is talking about their own childhood. The original also uses skipped where given is needed to express that the grandparents provided the bike. Use by to identify who gave it and for to indicate the occasion.

× He also had a bike when I was a child that was skipped from my grandparents to my 6th birthday and that was really exciting experience.

✓ I also had a bike when I was a child. It was given to me by my grandparents for my sixth birthday, and it was a really exciting experience.

The singular countable noun experience needs an article. Use a before exciting experience.

× I remember how my aunt teach me how to ride this bike and the, uh, that was one of the most wonderful experience for my childhood.

✓ I remember how my aunt taught me to ride this bike, and that was one of the most wonderful experiences of my childhood.

The student is describing a childhood event, so the past form taught is needed instead of teach.

× I remember how my aunt teach me how to ride this bike and the, uh, that was one of the most wonderful experience for my childhood.

✓ I remember how my aunt taught me to ride this bike, and that was one of the most wonderful experiences of my childhood.

After one of the most, the noun must be plural because the phrase refers to one item from a group. Use experiences, not experience.

× I remember how my aunt teach me how to ride this bike and the, uh, that was one of the most wonderful experience for my childhood.

✓ I remember how my aunt taught me to ride this bike, and that was one of the most wonderful experiences of my childhood.

Use of my childhood to describe an experience belonging to that period. For my childhood is not the natural preposition phrase in this context.

× I really like this time and for of to nowadays.

✓ I really liked that time, and I still enjoy biking nowadays.

The original sentence contains an incomplete and disorganized phrase after and, so its structure is unclear. Form a complete clause with a subject and verb, such as I still enjoy biking nowadays.

× I enjoyed to, uh, do that every day.

✓ I enjoyed doing that every day.

Enjoy is followed by a gerund, the -ing form of a verb, rather than a to-infinitive. Use doing instead of to do.

× And the, uh, young people really enjoy to pass their time with riding the bike.

✓ Young people really enjoy spending their time riding bikes.

Enjoy should be followed by a gerund, so use spending rather than to pass. The activity after spending time is also expressed naturally with a gerund: riding bikes.