Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly first, then explain that your family could not afford a bike. Clarify whether you borrowed bikes from friends and whether you actually learned to ride; the current answer is difficult to follow. Use past tense for your childhood and more natural phrases such as “afford one” and “ride a bike.”

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my family couldn’t afford one. I sometimes borrowed bikes from my friends, but I never learned how to ride properly. I still haven’t learned, although I’d like to try someday.

제안: Give a clear answer about their popularity in your country, then add a specific reason or example. Avoid repeating “childhood” and the broad claim about the whole world. Correct the structure to “not only … but also …,” say “one of the experiences,” and connect your personal comment smoothly.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. They’re an affordable way to get around, and many children learn to ride them in their neighborhoods. I never learned myself, though, so I missed out on that childhood experience.

× When I'm busy by 21 when I was young I was not really riding a bike because we don't have money to afford to buy.

✓ When I was young, I didn't really ride a bike because we didn't have money to afford one.

The sentence describes a situation in the past, so use the past-tense form didn't have rather than don't have. The simple past didn't really ride is also more suitable for describing a general habit during childhood. The phrase When I'm busy by 21 is unclear, so it has been omitted rather than guessed at.

× But I borrowed through my friends and still I don't know how to bike even though I am old enough to learn about it.

✓ But I borrowed a bike from my friends, and I still don't know how to ride one, even though I am old enough to learn.

Use from to identify the people who lent you something. Through does not express the source of a borrowed item. Ride a bike is the usual expression for using a bike.

× I think bikes are not only popular in our country but also in all over the world because it's part of our childhood and everyone's childhood and umm, but is one of the experience that I never learned.

✓ I think bikes are popular not only in our country but also all over the world because they are part of our childhood and everyone's childhood. But it is one of the experiences I never learned about.

Do not use in before all over the world. Say popular all over the world. The correction also separates the unfinished final thought into a complete sentence.

× I think bikes are not only popular in our country but also in all over the world because it's part of our childhood and everyone's childhood and umm, but is one of the experience that I never learned.

✓ I think bikes are popular not only in our country but also all over the world because they are part of our childhood and everyone's childhood. But it is one of the experiences I never learned about.

After one of, the noun must be plural because one item is being selected from a group. Use experiences, not experience.

× I think bikes are not only popular in our country but also in all over the world because it's part of our childhood and everyone's childhood and umm, but is one of the experience that I never learned.

✓ I think bikes are popular not only in our country but also all over the world because they are part of our childhood and everyone's childhood. But it is one of the experiences I never learned about.

The clause but is one of the experiences is missing a subject. Add it before is to make the clause complete. Also, use they to refer to the plural noun bikes.