Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, then give the two useful details without repeated fillers. Correct “when I was a three years old” to “when I was three years old.” “Training wheels” is the natural term for the extra wheels on a child’s bike; you could say you learned to ride without them.

예시: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My father bought me one when I was three, and I loved riding it. By the time I was about six, I could ride it on my own without training wheels.

제안: Give a clear yes-or-no opinion first, then explain why bikes are popular with one specific detail. Use “women are using bikes more than before,” not “women’s are musing bikes.” If you mean protective headgear, the word is “helmets,” not “caskets.” Reduce fillers and connect your ideas with “for example” or “also.”

예시: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country. More women seem to be cycling than in the past, and many people ride for exercise or to get around. For safety, cyclists usually wear helmets.

× When I was a three years old, my father bought me a bike.

✓ When I was three years old, my father bought me a bike.

Do not use the article a before an age expressed as three years old. Use a before a singular age noun instead, as in I was a three-year-old.

× Women's are musing bikes more than years before.

✓ Women are using bikes more than in previous years.

Women's is a possessive form and cannot serve as the subject here. Use the plural noun women. Also, use in previous years to make the comparison grammatically clear.

× Women are musing bikes more than years before.

✓ Women are using bikes more than in previous years.

The comparison needs the preposition in: more than in previous years. This makes clear that the comparison is with how often women used bikes during earlier years.

× People are using bikes for their health, of course that they can ride it very well.

✓ People are using bikes for their health, and of course they can ride them very well.

Use them to refer to bikes, which is plural. It refers to one singular object. The phrase of course that is also not appropriate here; use and of course they can to connect the ideas.

× People are using bikes for their health, of course that they can ride it very well.

✓ People are using bikes for their health, and of course they can ride them very well.

That does not correctly connect these clauses after of course. Use and of course they can, or separate the ideas into two sentences.