Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly in the past tense, since the question asks about your childhood. Use a natural phrase such as “It was called…” rather than “the name of the bike was…”. Replace “smart in travelling” with a clear description, such as “easy to ride,” and avoid repeating “bike.” Add one specific detail about where you rode it or why you enjoyed it.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was called an Activa, and it was easy to ride. I often used it to travel around my neighbourhood, and I really enjoyed those rides.

제안: Begin with a clear opinion, such as “Yes, I think they are popular.” Explain why with a specific reason, for example, that bikes are affordable or useful in traffic. Avoid fillers and the repeated, contradictory use of “convenient” and “inconvenient.” You can say that they are convenient for people of all genders.

예시: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. They are convenient because people can use them to get around quickly, especially when the roads are busy. They are also suitable for both men and women.

× I have a bike, the name of the bike was Activa and it was very smart in travelling and whenever I travel in that bike I enjoy a lot.

✓ I had a bike called Activa. It was very convenient for traveling, and whenever I rode it, I enjoyed it a lot.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use past-tense verbs. Change have to had, travel to rode, and enjoy to enjoyed to keep the verbs consistent with that past time.

× I have a bike, the name of the bike was Activa and it was very smart in travelling and whenever I travel in that bike I enjoy a lot.

✓ I had a bike called Activa. It was very convenient for traveling, and whenever I rode it, I enjoyed it a lot.

The usual preposition is on when describing being on a bike, as in travel on a bike. Alternatively, use the verb ride, as in rode it.

× I have a bike, the name of the bike was Activa and it was very smart in travelling and whenever I travel in that bike I enjoy a lot.

✓ I had a bike called Activa. It was very convenient for traveling, and whenever I rode it, I enjoyed it a lot.

Smart usually describes intelligence or stylishness, so it does not naturally describe how well a bike serves for travel. Use an adjective such as convenient or good to describe the bike's usefulness for traveling.

× Guess bikes are popular in my country because, uh, the way we travel one place to another, it is very helpful in that, uh, area and it is also convenient to use. Boys and girls are very, uh, convenient or it, it is inconvenient for both the gender boy and girl.

✓ I guess bikes are popular in my country because they are very helpful for traveling from one place to another and are also convenient to use. Bikes are convenient for both boys and girls.

The first clause is missing its subject: add I before guess. The reason clause also needs a clear subject and complete structure. State directly that bikes are helpful and convenient. In the final clause, the original wording is unclear and contradictory, so the correction expresses the positive meaning indicated by the response.

× Guess bikes are popular in my country because, uh, the way we travel one place to another, it is very helpful in that, uh, area and it is also convenient to use. Boys and girls are very, uh, convenient or it, it is inconvenient for both the gender boy and girl.

✓ I guess bikes are popular in my country because they are very helpful for traveling from one place to another and are also convenient to use. Bikes are convenient for both boys and girls.

Use from and to to describe movement between two places: travel from one place to another. The original omits from.

× Guess bikes are popular in my country because, uh, the way we travel one place to another, it is very helpful in that, uh, area and it is also convenient to use. Boys and girls are very, uh, convenient or it, it is inconvenient for both the gender boy and girl.

✓ I guess bikes are popular in my country because they are very helpful for traveling from one place to another and are also convenient to use. Bikes are convenient for both boys and girls.

The phrase both the gender boy and girl uses singular forms where plural forms are needed. Say both boys and girls. Both refers to two groups, so the nouns should be plural.

× Guess bikes are popular in my country because, uh, the way we travel one place to another, it is very helpful in that, uh, area and it is also convenient to use. Boys and girls are very, uh, convenient or it, it is inconvenient for both the gender boy and girl.

✓ I guess bikes are popular in my country because they are very helpful for traveling from one place to another and are also convenient to use. Bikes are convenient for both boys and girls.

People are not usually described as convenient; things or services are convenient for people. Make bikes the subject of the final sentence: Bikes are convenient for both boys and girls.