Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, then add one or two clear details. Replace the unnatural phrase “I would love to ride it” with “I loved riding it,” and avoid fillers such as “uh.” Describe the paint more naturally, for example, “It had lots of colorful patterns.”

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I loved riding it. It was quite heavy, but I thought it was beautiful. It was dark blue and had colorful patterns painted on it.

제안: Give a clear opinion about bikes first; your answer currently shifts to cars and does not clearly say whether bikes are popular. Then support your view with a specific reason or comparison. Use “prefer to drive” rather than “love to ride cars,” and avoid repeated fillers and corrections.

예시: Bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially for short trips and exercise. However, many people prefer driving cars because they are more comfortable and convenient, particularly in bad weather.

× It was heavy and I would love to ride it.

✓ It was heavy, and I loved riding it.

The answer describes a childhood experience, so the past-tense form loved is more appropriate than would love. Use loved riding to describe an activity you enjoyed in the past.

× It was dark blue and lots of paint painting on it.

✓ It was dark blue, and there was a lot of paint peeling off it.

The second part of the original sentence has no finite verb, so it is an incomplete clause. Add there was to form a complete clause. Peeling describes the paint coming off the bike.

× I don't think the people in my country mostly love, uh, would love to ride cars, drive cars, and uh, they, uh, uh they love cars to buy.

✓ I don't think people in my country mostly love bikes; they would rather drive cars and buy them.

The original combines unfinished and repeated phrases, making the sentence structure unclear. Separate the contrasting ideas into two clauses, and place buy before its object: buy cars, not cars to buy.