Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, then add one or two clear details. Use past tense consistently (“used”), avoid repeating “ride,” and say “best friend” rather than “most best friend.” Complete your final thought and keep the answer to no more than five sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue one with training wheels, which my parents bought for me. I used to ride it around my neighborhood after school, often to visit my best friend.

제안: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one specific reason or example. Avoid repeating “whether,” “over here,” and “they”; use natural phrases such as “people of all ages” and “commute to work.” Finish your answer with a complete sentence.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people use them to commute to work or to exercise, especially in cities with bike lanes. You can see people of all ages riding them, from children to older adults.

× It was a small blue bike with training wheels that my parents bought me and I use it to ride it around our streets after school with my friends.

✓ It was a small blue bike with training wheels that my parents bought me, and I used it to ride around our streets after school with my friends.

The student is describing childhood events in the past, so use used rather than use. The extra it after ride is also unnecessary, but the main tense correction is used.

× I rode it to my most best friend's house almost every afternoon and I kept riding it

✓ I rode it to my best friend's house almost every afternoon, and I kept riding it.

Best is already the superlative form of good, so it cannot be combined with most. Use best, not most best.

× Oh yes, every individual rides a bike over here whether it's to commute to their work or like for physical exercise, whether it's you can say whether it's an old aged guy, whether it's a young guy or whether it's a toddler, they everybody over here they used to ride bicycles.

✓ Oh yes, people here ride bikes, whether they are commuting to work or exercising. Everyone here rides a bicycle, whether they are old, young, or a toddler.

The original sentence repeats whether clauses and uses the incomplete phrase whether it's you can say. It also redundantly combines they and everybody. Organize the examples into a clear list and use one subject for the main clause.

× They everybody over here they used to ride bicycles.

✓ Everybody here rides bicycles.

The student is describing what people generally do now, so the present simple rides is appropriate. Used to describes a past habit that no longer happens. Also, everybody is singular and takes rides.

× They are very

✓ They are very popular.

The sentence is incomplete because very needs to modify an adjective or adverb, and the thought has no complement. Add the intended description, such as popular, to complete the sentence.