Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and avoid the unnecessary filler “you know.” Your main idea is clear, but the sentence is too long and contains a grammar error: use “it was also a great way to get around.” Keep the past tense consistent by changing “I enjoy” to “I enjoyed,” and separate the reason from the feeling with a linking word.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I used to ride it to school. It was a convenient way to get around, and I enjoyed the sense of freedom it gave me.

제안: Give a clear answer to the question first, then add a relevant detail. Avoid restarting the sentence with “if we had back” and use the correct word “bikes,” not “bias.” If you want to compare the present with the past, use a clear structure such as “Twenty years ago, …, whereas today …” and explain whether bikes are popular now.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in busy cities. They’re an affordable way to travel, and many people use them for short journeys or exercise.

× Yeah, you know that I used to go to school by bike when I was a child because it was a convenient and efficient vehicle and also get a way to get around and I enjoy the sense of freedom it gave me

✓ Yeah, I used to go to school by bike when I was a child because it was a convenient and efficient vehicle and also a way to get around. I enjoyed the sense of freedom it gave me.

The answer describes a past experience, so enjoy should be in the past tense: enjoyed. Keep the verbs in the same time frame when describing what you felt as a child.

× Yeah, you know that I used to go to school by bike when I was a child because it was a convenient and efficient vehicle and also get a way to get around and I enjoy the sense of freedom it gave me

✓ Yeah, I used to go to school by bike when I was a child because it was a convenient and efficient vehicle and also a way to get around. I enjoyed the sense of freedom it gave me.

The phrase also get a way does not fit grammatically after it was. Use also a way to get around to complete the description, and separate the two complete ideas with a period. In a direct answer, you can also omit you know that to make the sentence clearer.

× Yes, of course, if we had back to if we had back twenty more than twenty years ago there were so many bias or grow up like mushroom everywhere.

✓ Yes, of course. If we go back more than twenty years, there were so many bikes, and they seemed to be growing like mushrooms everywhere.

The phrase if we had back to if we had back contains a repeated, incomplete clause. Use the clear phrase if we go back more than twenty years. The original also joins ideas in a confusing way; separating the opening phrase with a comma makes the sentence easier to follow.

× Yes, of course, if we had back to if we had back twenty more than twenty years ago there were so many bias or grow up like mushroom everywhere.

✓ Yes, of course. If we go back more than twenty years, there were so many bikes, and they seemed to be growing like mushrooms everywhere.

The sentence refers to many bikes and uses a plural comparison, so the plural form mushrooms is needed. The word bias does not fit the context; bikes appears to be the intended word.