Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly using the past tense: “Yes, I had a bike.” Correct “that have” to “I had,” and use past-tense verbs such as “played” and “had.” Explain where you rode and give one specific memory. Avoid repeating the idea in “We really enjoy the time at the time”; use a linking phrase such as “We had a lot of fun because…” instead.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends, and we sometimes had little races. It was a fun way to spend time together after school.

제안: Give a clear answer and support it with a natural reason or example. Avoid the unsupported statistic “80%” unless you are sure it is accurate. Correct “most of the people… they have” to “most people have,” and replace unclear phrases such as “from a child or growing up” and “it’s proper in here” with specific wording about who rides bikes and why.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride them for commuting or exercise, especially in places where the roads have bike lanes. Children also often learn to ride when they are young.

× Of course that have a bike when I was a child

✓ Of course, I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about a time in the past, and the phrase when I was a child confirms that past time. Use the simple past had instead of have.

× Of course that have a bike when I was a child

✓ Of course, I had a bike when I was a child.

That is not the correct subject pronoun here. Use I to refer to yourself. In answers about personal experiences, make sure the subject pronoun is clear.

× I usually play with my friend, my neighborhood, we often have a bike races.

✓ I usually played with my friends in my neighborhood, and we often had bike races.

The student is describing childhood, so the verbs should be in the past tense: played and had. When describing a completed period in the past, keep the verbs in that tense.

× I usually play with my friend, my neighborhood, we often have a bike races.

✓ I usually played with my friends in my neighborhood, and we often had bike races.

Use in before my neighborhood to show where the activity happened. Use a preposition to clearly express the relationship between an activity and its location.

× I usually play with my friend, my neighborhood, we often have a bike races.

✓ I usually played with my friends in my neighborhood, and we often had bike races.

A cannot be used before the plural noun races. Remove a to form bike races. Use a bike race only when referring to one race.

× I usually play with my friend, my neighborhood, we often have a bike races.

✓ I usually played with my friends in my neighborhood, and we often had bike races.

The original joins independent clauses with a comma, creating a comma splice. Join the ideas with and, or separate them into two sentences.

× We really enjoy the time at the time.

✓ We really enjoyed that time.

The student is talking about childhood, which is in the past, so use enjoyed rather than enjoy. Use the past tense consistently when recounting past experiences.

× Yes, I guess it is.

✓ Yes, I guess they are.

The question asks whether bikes are popular, so the pronoun should refer to plural bikes. Use they are rather than it is to match the plural subject.

× In my country most of the people, like 80% people, they have their own bike.

✓ In my country, about 80% of people have their own bikes.

When a percentage is followed by a plural noun, use of: 80% of people. This pattern is also correct with other percentages, such as 50% of students.

× In my country most of the people, like 80% people, they have their own bike.

✓ In my country, about 80% of people have their own bikes.

The original repeats the subject: most of the people and they. State the subject once, then use the verb. Avoid repeating a noun phrase with a pronoun in this sentence structure.

× No matter it's from a child or growing up, they finally buy their own bike.

✓ Whether they are children or adults, they eventually buy their own bikes.

Whether is the appropriate conjunction for presenting alternatives. The original does not form parallel alternatives. Pair whether with alternatives that have the same grammatical form, such as children or adults.

× Of course it's proper in here.

✓ Of course, it's proper here.

In here usually refers to being inside a particular enclosed place. When referring generally to a country or location, use here without in.