Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 先直接回答“有”，再说明父亲送你自行车的时间和你骑车的场景。“One night was 18 year old”表达不清；如果想说年龄，可用“When I was eight/eighteen”。注意童年经历用过去时，例如“rode”，而不是“ride/will ride”。“when I was failed”不自然；如果想表达心情不好或有压力，可以说“when I felt stressed”。最后用具体地点或活动补充即可，避免句子过长。

예시: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike for my birthday when I was a child. I used to ride it around a nearby park, especially when I wanted to relax.

제안: 开头已经明确回答了问题，可以删去后面重复的“I think”。把“Almost everyone has a bike in their life”换成更准确的说法，例如“Many people own a bike”或“Bikes are especially popular among children”。注意语法：泛指父母时用“Parents”，表达“没有学习任务时”可说“when they don’t have schoolwork”。最后补充一个具体原因或用途，并结束完整句子。

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. Many parents buy bicycles for their children, who often ride them in their free time. They’re also a convenient and affordable way to get around.

× One night was 18 year old, my father bought me a bike as a birthday gift.

✓ When I was 18 years old, my father bought me a bike as a birthday gift.

“One night was 18 year old”缺少正确的主语和句子结构。表达“当我18岁时”应使用“When I was 18 years old”。此外，年龄中的“year”应使用复数“years”。

× One night was 18 year old, my father bought me a bike as a birthday gift.

✓ When I was 18 years old, my father bought me a bike as a birthday gift.

表示年龄时，数字大于1，时间单位应使用复数形式，因此应说“18 years old”，而不是“18 year old”。

× So I sometimes ride my bike in my childhood.

✓ So I sometimes rode my bike during my childhood.

“in my childhood”描述的是过去的童年经历，因此动词应使用过去式“rode”，不能用现在式“ride”。描述一段时期时，“during my childhood”也比“in my childhood”更自然。

× When I was failed, I will ride my bike in some nature park.

✓ When I failed, I would ride my bike in some nature park.

“fail”在这里表示“失败”，通常作主动用法，不应写成“was failed”。此外，整句话描述过去反复发生的事情，后半句应使用“would ride”，而不是“will ride”。

× When I was failed, I will ride my bike in some nature park.

✓ When I failed, I would ride my bike in some nature park.

句子讲的是童年时的经历，属于过去的习惯性行为，因此应用“would ride”来表达过去常常会做的事，而不是用表示将来的“will ride”。

× Almost everyone has a bike in their life, especially childhood.

✓ Almost everyone has a bike at some point in their life, especially during childhood.

“especially childhood”中缺少合适的介词。表示“尤其是在童年时期”时，应说“especially during childhood”；“at some point in their life”则更自然地表达“在人生中的某个阶段”。

× The parents always buy a bike for their children and they can ride their bikes when they are not have some study works.

✓ Parents always buy a bike for their children, and they can ride their bikes when they do not have any schoolwork.

一般现在时的否定句需要使用助动词“do not”加动词原形，不能说“are not have”。因此应改为“do not have”。

× The parents always buy a bike for their children and they can ride their bikes when they are not have some study works.

✓ Parents always buy a bike for their children, and they can ride their bikes when they do not have any schoolwork.

“schoolwork”表示学习作业时通常是不可数名词，不能加复数词尾“-s”。因此不应使用“works”；可改用不可数名词“schoolwork”。

× I I think it very.

✓ I think it is very popular.

原句重复了主语“I”，而且“think”后面的从句缺少谓语动词和必要的补足内容。结合上文讨论自行车是否受欢迎，应说“I think it is very popular”。