Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, then add a few clear details about the bike and how you learned to ride it. Use “two-wheeled” to describe the bike, “bought it for me” to explain your dad’s action, and “ride” rather than “write.” Finish the final thought clearly and avoid awkward phrases such as “kept moving on and learning how to actually.”

예시: Yes, I had a small two-wheeled bike when I was a child. My dad bought it for me, and I learned to ride it with help from my friends. I fell a few times at first, but I kept practicing and eventually learned how to balance.

제안: Give a direct answer, but avoid claiming that bikes are the most common vehicles unless you are sure. Keep the subject and pronouns consistent: use “bikes” with “they,” or “a bike” with “it.” Correct “to the work/school” to “to work/school,” remove the repeated “to,” and use a clear linker such as “Besides” to introduce other uses.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in smaller towns. Many adults ride them to work, while children often use them to get to school. Besides being a convenient way to travel, bikes are also popular for exercise and weekend rides.

× At first I fell but I didn't give up and kept moving on and learning how to actually.

✓ At first I fell, but I didn't give up; I kept moving on and learning how to actually do it.

The ending how to actually is incomplete because how to must be followed by a verb phrase. Complete the idea by adding do it or another suitable verb phrase.

× Everyone used it to solve their problems.

✓ Everyone uses it to solve their problems.

The student is describing what people generally do, so the simple present is appropriate. Change used to uses to match the present-time meaning.

× Everyone used it to solve their problems.

✓ Everyone used them to solve their problems.

It refers to bikes, which is plural. Use the plural pronoun them. The verb tense is left unchanged here because this correction addresses the pronoun issue.

× Adults use it to to go to the work, meanwhile children use it to go to the school.

✓ Adults use them to go to the work, meanwhile children use them to go to the school.

It refers to bikes in general, so the plural pronoun them is needed. The verb tense is already appropriate for a general statement.

× Adults use it to to go to the work, meanwhile children use it to go to the school.

✓ Adults use it to to go to work, meanwhile children use it to go to school.

Work and school are used without the in these common expressions. Say go to work and go to school when referring generally to these activities or destinations.

× Adults use it to to go to the work, meanwhile children use it to go to the school.

✓ Adults use it to go to the work; meanwhile, children use it to go to the school.

The original joins two independent clauses with a comma before meanwhile, creating a comma splice. Use a semicolon or a full stop before meanwhile. Also, only one to is needed before go.

× If not that, people actually can use it for even sport and other things.

✓ If not that, people actually can use them for even sport and other things.

It refers to bikes in general, so use the plural pronoun them. The correction is limited to the pronoun issue.