Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: You answer the question directly and add relevant details about the gift and how you used the bike. Correct the unnatural phrase “as a birthday, presents” to “as a birthday present,” and avoid the comma between “birthday” and “present.” You could also vary “rode it every day” with a more precise expression if appropriate.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad gave it to me as a birthday present when I was ten, and I rode it almost every day. I used to visit my friends and explore the neighborhood on it.

제안: You give a clear opinion and a reason, but repetitions and self-corrections make the answer difficult to follow. Say “in my country” once, use the plural “bikes” with “they,” and replace “many purpose” with “many purposes.” Describe older people simply as “older adults,” and use the natural phrase “to go shopping” instead of “to buy something or to go to the supermarkets.”

예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people, especially older adults, use them to go shopping or travel short distances. Cycling can also help them avoid traffic jams.

× My dad bought it for me as a birthday, presents when I was ten, and I rode it every day to visit my friends and explore the neighborhood.

✓ My dad bought it for me as a birthday present when I was ten, and I rode it every day to visit my friends and explore the neighborhood.

The singular article a must be followed by a singular countable noun. Use present, not presents, after a birthday.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

The phrase in our is an incomplete false start, and it is followed by the intended phrase in my country. Use only one prepositional phrase: in my country.

× People use it for for many purpose such as the old the older people or the oldest people use it for to buy something or to go to the supermarkets to avoid the traffic jams.

✓ People use bikes for many purposes; for example, older people use them to buy things or go to supermarkets to avoid traffic jams.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use them to agree in number with bikes.

× People use it for for many purpose such as the old the older people or the oldest people use it for to buy something or to go to the supermarkets to avoid the traffic jams.

✓ People use bikes for many purposes; for example, older people use them to buy things or go to supermarkets to avoid traffic jams.

Many is used with plural countable nouns, so purpose should be purposes. The repeated words are also removed to make the sentence clear.

× People use it for for many purpose such as the old the older people or the oldest people use it for to buy something or to go to the supermarkets to avoid the traffic jams.

✓ People use bikes for many purposes; for example, older people use them to buy things or go to supermarkets to avoid traffic jams.

In this sentence, use something to do something is the correct structure. Do not put for before the infinitive to buy.