Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Начните с прямого и грамматически правильного ответа: «Yes, I did». Используйте прошедшее время и естественные сочетания: «I got a bike», «my parents bought it for me», «ride it». Фраза «I was able to» здесь незаконченная — уточните, чему именно вы научились. Сократите повторы и добавьте одну конкретную деталь о том, как вы научились ездить.

예시: Yes, I did. I got a bike for my tenth birthday, and at first I was nervous because I couldn’t control it very well. After a few days of practice, I learned how to ride it confidently.

제안: Ответьте прямо: «Yes, bikes are popular in my country». Проверьте ключевые слова: «popular» означает «популярный», а не «purple»; «bike», а не «bank». Неясные фразы о том, что другие дети тоже хотели бы велосипед, замените конкретной причиной или примером. Используйте связку «because» или «for example» и ограничьтесь двумя-тремя ясными предложениями.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. Many kids learn to ride when they’re young, and having a bike is often seen as a fun part of growing up. For example, my friends and I used to ride our bikes together after school.

× I get to have a bike when I was like 10

✓ I got to have a bike when I was like 10

The sentence refers to a completed event in the past, as shown by 'when I was like 10'. Use the past-tense form 'got' rather than 'get'.

× I surely did, I get to have a bike when I was like 10 and my parents bought me for my birthday and at first I was really scared to write it back but because I couldn't control it at first.

✓ I surely did. I got to have a bike when I was like 10, and my parents bought me one for my birthday. At first, I was really scared to write it back, but I couldn't control it.

The original joins several complete thoughts with commas, creating a run-on sentence. Also, 'bought me' needs an object here; 'bought me one' completes the thought. Avoid starting a dependent clause with 'but because' unless it is connected to a complete main clause. Break long answers into shorter sentences and check that each clause is complete.

× Like as an example if I had a bike, other kids in my country also did like it.

✓ For example, if I had a bike, other kids in my country would also like it.

This is a hypothetical conditional. Use 'would' in the result clause after the 'if' clause with 'had'. 'Did like' does not express the intended hypothetical result. Use 'For example' rather than the redundant phrase 'Like as an example'.