Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly using the past tense: say “I had a bike,” not “I do have a bike.” Then explain how you used it, linking the idea with “because” or “so.” Use a natural phrase such as “discover new places” or “have new experiences,” and avoid running several ideas together in one sentence.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I loved riding it around my neighborhood because it let me explore places I hadn’t visited before.

제안: Make the subject clear by saying “bikes are popular” rather than “it’s popular.” Avoid repeating “reminds us,” and use a more natural expression such as “give people a sense of freedom.” Support your answer with one or two clear reasons, and explain that people cycle to avoid traffic rather than “for the traffic.”

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people enjoy cycling because it gives them a sense of freedom, and it can also be a convenient way to avoid heavy traffic in cities.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child and I like to explore new places so my bike helped me to discover new experience.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I liked to explore new places, so my bike helped me discover new experiences.

The answer describes a period in the past, so use past-tense verbs: had instead of do have and liked instead of like. Keep the verbs consistent with when I was a child.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child and I like to explore new places so my bike helped me to discover new experience.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I liked to explore new places, so my bike helped me discover new experiences.

Experience is a countable noun here, and the sentence refers generally to the different things the speaker discovered. Use its plural form, experiences.

× Yes, it's actually popular in my country because people like to discover also new places and it reminds us reminds us of freedom. So people also use bicycles for the traffic because there is so much traffic in the country.

✓ Yes, bikes are actually popular in my country because people also like to discover new places, and they remind us of freedom. People also use bicycles to get around because there is so much traffic in the country.

Bikes and bicycles are plural, so use the plural pronoun they rather than it. The verb should agree with the plural subject: bikes are popular. Avoid repeating the phrase reminds us.

× Yes, it's actually popular in my country because people like to discover also new places and it reminds us reminds us of freedom. So people also use bicycles for the traffic because there is so much traffic in the country.

✓ Yes, bikes are actually popular in my country because people also like to discover new places, and they remind us of freedom. People also use bicycles to get around because there is so much traffic in the country.

Also is awkwardly placed between discover and its object, new places. Place also before the verb phrase, as in also like to discover new places, or at the end: like to discover new places too.

× Yes, it's actually popular in my country because people like to discover also new places and it reminds us reminds us of freedom. So people also use bicycles for the traffic because there is so much traffic in the country.

✓ Yes, bikes are actually popular in my country because people also like to discover new places, and they remind us of freedom. People also use bicycles to get around because there is so much traffic in the country.

For the traffic does not express the intended reason for using bicycles naturally. Use a purpose phrase such as to get around; the following clause explains why people choose this form of transportation.