Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
수험생
I used to ride a Rotor bike when I was a child and this is one of my favorite activities because I think riding the bike could help me gain my better stamina without forcing me to do things that I like. Moreover, I really enjoy the time that I could ride a bike. Why Viewing?
시험관
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
수험생
I don't think so many people in my country prefer driving personal cars because they don't want their skin to get burned. In Thailand, due to the hot weather, we have to avoid facing sunlight every day. Therefore, driving personal cars not only bring me to umm farther distance, but it could allow us to umm avoid.
평가
총점
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
점수: 52.0제안: ตอบคำถามให้ตรงและเริ่มด้วยประโยคหลักที่ชัดเจน เช่น “Yes, I did.” จากนั้นอธิบายว่าคุณใช้จักรยานทำอะไรและเพราะเหตุใด ใช้สำนวนให้เป็นธรรมชาติ เช่น “build my stamina” แทน “gain my better stamina” และหลีกเลี่ยงประโยคที่ความหมายขัดแย้งกันอย่าง “without forcing me to do things that I like” คำว่า “Why Viewing?” ไม่เกี่ยวข้องกับคำถาม จึงควรตัดออก ควรจำกัดคำตอบไว้ไม่เกิน 5 ประโยค
예시: Yes, I did. I had a Rotor bike and used to ride it around my neighborhood. It was one of my favorite activities because it helped me build my stamina while having fun.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
점수: 35.0제안: ตอบให้ชัดก่อนว่าจักรยานเป็นที่นิยมหรือไม่ แล้วจึงให้เหตุผลและตัวอย่าง คำตอบปัจจุบันเริ่มด้วยการพูดถึงรถยนต์ ทำให้ไม่ชัดว่ากำลังตอบเรื่องความนิยมของจักรยานหรือไม่ อีกทั้งประโยคท้ายไม่สมบูรณ์และมีการใช้กริยาไม่สอดคล้องกัน เช่น “cars not only bring” ควรใช้ “cars not only take” และอธิบายให้ครบว่ารถช่วยหลีกเลี่ยงอะไร เช่น ความร้อนหรือแสงแดด
예시: I don't think bikes are very popular in Thailand, especially in big cities. Because the weather is hot, many people prefer driving cars to avoid the sun and stay cool. However, bicycles are still popular for exercise and short trips in some areas.
문법
× Therefore, driving personal cars not only bring me to umm farther distance, but it could allow us to umm avoid.
✓ Therefore, driving personal cars not only takes us farther, but also allows us to avoid the sunlight.
The gerund phrase driving personal cars is singular, so it requires singular verbs: takes and allows. Use the same pronoun consistently throughout the sentence. Also, avoid is normally followed by an object or a gerund; the sunlight completes the thought based on the preceding context.
× Therefore, driving personal cars not only bring me to umm farther distance, but it could allow us to umm avoid.
✓ Therefore, driving personal cars not only takes us farther, but also allows us to avoid the sunlight.
The correlative conjunction pattern not only ... but also should connect parallel parts of the sentence. Here, use takes ... but also allows, keeping the same subject and parallel verb phrases in both parts.
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