Part 1
시험관
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
수험생
Uh, yes, when our child, my father buy buy a bike for me and I'm very happy because this is my first bike, so I.
시험관
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
수험생
MMM, yeah. I think bike is popular because it's very normal life. You can use it, uh, quickly going, uh, everywhere and don't, uh.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
점수: 40.0제안: 先直接回答问题,并用过去时描述童年经历:“When I was a child”比“when our child”自然;“buy”应改为“bought”。避免重复单词,并补全句子。可以说明收到自行车时的感受或后来如何使用,控制在两三句内。
예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my father bought me my first bike, and I was really excited. I rode it around our neighborhood almost every day.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
점수: 38.0제안: 先明确表达“自行车在我国家很受欢迎”,注意泛指时用复数“bikes”。“very normal life”和“quickly going everywhere”不自然;可改为“a common way to get around”和“get places quickly”。再补充一个具体原因,例如费用低、方便停车或适合短途出行,并用连接词组织内容。
예시: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. They’re a convenient and affordable way to get around, especially for short trips. For example, people often ride them to nearby shops or work because they’re easy to park.
× Uh, yes, when our child, my father buy buy a bike for me and I'm very happy because this is my first bike, so I.
✓ Yes. When I was a child, my father bought me a bike, and I was very happy because it was my first bike.
这段话描述的是童年时发生的事情,应使用过去时。buy 应改为 bought;I'm 和 this is 应分别改为 I was 和 it was。重复的 buy 是口误,删除即可。
× when our child
✓ when I was a child
学生在描述自己的童年,应使用第一人称 I,而不是表示“我们的”的 our。可以记住:谈论自己的经历时,使用 I/my;谈论共同经历时,才使用 we/our。
× so I
✓ 删除未完成的“so I”,并在“bike”处结束句子。
“so I”引出了后续结果,但后面没有完整的谓语或意思,因此构成未完成的句子。口语中如果话说到一半停住,应删去这个未完成部分,或补充完整意思。
× I think bike is popular
✓ I think bikes are popular.
这里是在泛指自行车这一类事物,应使用复数 bikes,并搭配 are。泛指一类可数名词时,通常使用复数形式。
× it's very normal life
✓ They are a normal part of everyday life.
normal part 是可数名词短语的单数形式,前面需要不定冠词 a。此外,表达“日常生活中的正常组成部分”时,可以说 a normal part of everyday life。
× You can use it, uh, quickly going, uh, everywhere
✓ You can use them to get around quickly almost anywhere.
这里要表达使用自行车的目的,应使用 use + 宾语 + to do 的结构,例如 use them to get around。quickly going 不能自然地接在 use it 后表达这个意思;表示“快速地”时,quickly 放在 get around 后面更自然。
× and don't, uh.
✓ 删除未完成的“and don't”,或补充完整的内容。
and 后面接了 don't,但没有说明“不做什么”,因此句子结构不完整。口语中可以删去这个未完成的部分;如果要保留,则需补上完整的动词短语,例如 and don't need a car。