Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, then organize the details into shorter sentences. Avoid repeating “bike” and “I had”; use the past tense consistently, such as “loved” and “used to ride.” The phrase “bake my bikes” is unclear—if you mean you damaged them, say “break my bikes.” Give one specific detail about where you rode.

예시: Yes, I had a few bikes when I was growing up, especially between the ages of twelve and fourteen. I loved riding them with my friends, and we often explored quiet roads and places we hadn’t visited before. It was one of my favorite ways to spend time outdoors.

제안: Give a clear yes-or-no answer first, then explain who uses bikes and why. The phrase “I totally agree with the statement” is unnecessary, and the later part of the answer is difficult to understand. Clarify whether you mean bicycles or motorcycles, and use a specific comparison or example. Keep the answer to two or three well-connected sentences.

예시: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among children and people who live in smaller towns. Many adults, however, prefer motorcycles because they are faster for commuting. You can still see children riding bicycles in parks and residential areas.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child around the age of twelve to fourteen I had multiple bikes because I was a naughty kid and I used to bake my bikes and I love riding my bikes and like me and my friend used to travel various undiscovered places with our bikes.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. Between the ages of twelve and fourteen, I had multiple bikes because I was a naughty kid. I used to bake my bikes, and I loved riding them. My friend and I used to travel to various undiscovered places on our bikes.

The original response combines several complete ideas without appropriate punctuation, creating a run-on sentence. Break it into shorter sentences or connect the ideas with suitable punctuation and conjunctions. The word bake is retained because it is a word-choice issue, not one of the listed grammar types.

× I love riding my bikes.

✓ I loved riding my bikes.

The student is describing childhood experiences in the past, so the past-tense form loved is consistent with the surrounding past-tense verbs.

× like me and my friend used to travel

✓ My friend and I used to travel

Use the subject pronoun I, not the object pronoun me, because the pronouns are the subject of used to travel. In a compound subject, my friend and I is the standard form.

× travel various undiscovered places

✓ travel to various undiscovered places

When travel is followed by a destination, use the preposition to before the place.

× most of the people, even adults had bikes and I was younger, today they are a place where motorcycles

✓ When I was younger, most people, including adults, had bikes. Today, bikes have been replaced by motorcycles.

The original clause does not clearly connect the time phrase when I was younger to the statement about people having bikes, and the phrase they are a place where motorcycles does not form a clear sentence. Use complete clauses and make the relationship between the past and present ideas explicit.

× today they are a place where motorcycles

✓ Today, bikes have been replaced by motorcycles.

The intended meaning is that motorcycles have taken the place of bikes. Use the passive structure have been replaced by to show that bikes receive the action.

× bikes are popular till late in children

✓ Bikes are still popular among children.

Use among when describing something popular within a group of people. Still is the appropriate word here to indicate that bikes remain popular.

× few adults

✓ a few adults

Use a few to mean a small but positive number of adults. Few without a generally emphasizes that the number is very small or insufficient.