Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly and use a more natural phrase such as “when I was a child” instead of “when I was young.” Also, “my sister gave me a bike” is clearer and more natural than “I got a bike ... from my sister.” You could add one specific detail about how you used the bike to make the answer more developed.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My older sister gave it to me for my eighth birthday, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood after school.

제안: The answer is relevant and includes a clear reason, but “so popular” would be more natural as “very popular,” and “riding a bike” could be changed to “cycling” to avoid repetition. Be careful with the generalization “most people,” since not everyone necessarily cycles to school or work. Add a specific reason, such as affordability, convenience, or environmental benefits, and use a linking word to organize the details.

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among teenagers and young adults. They are relatively inexpensive and convenient for short journeys; moreover, many people use them to commute to school or work because they can avoid traffic jams.